the poem of abyss, (wrote it on weed)

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  1. woodstock193

    woodstock193 Member

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    The Poem Of Abyss



    Sleeps at dawn rises at dusk
    fills me with her goddes lust

    straddles me with her dark beauty
    brings me closer with her fury

    at night she sits and cries in rage
    her soul locked up inside a cage

    waits for death when shes alive
    till the night she finally dies

    Cannot be heard, felt, or seen
    still she haunts me in my dreams

    what is she after all of this
    she is but the black abyss
     
  2. hippie_chick666

    hippie_chick666 Senior Member

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    I llike your poem! It is very haunting and gave me goosebumps when I read it. Keep writing more while poking the smot...

    peace and love
     
  3. LordHelmet

    LordHelmet Member

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    good flow here, honestly though, i want another stanza....
     
  4. honeyhannah

    honeyhannah herbuhslovuh

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    I really like the images here
     
  5. deep_blue_death03

    deep_blue_death03 Member

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    hmm....i think i know her. =) But really, i like this poem. I love how it flows into such a perfect ending. Good use of words man. cool shit!
     

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