Writing Lyrics...

Discussion in 'Performing Arts' started by assfucksohard, Aug 12, 2004.

  1. assfucksohard

    assfucksohard Member

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    I play bass in a band, and we have a bunch of instrumental works. I decided to start writing lyrics, and singing, you know, writing some original stuff. However, whenever i try to write anything, there is a problem with it. Well first of all, I always feel like i try too hard not to be cliche, or to rip off anybody elses' music. And sometimes it feels like all of the good songs have already been written, and whatever I try to write will just be copying someone else. Does this happen to anyone else? Does anyone have any tips for writing lyrics or anything? This actually gets depressing....
     
  2. DarkLunacy

    DarkLunacy Senior Member

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    I started a thread about writing songs bro... you should find it. Dont get down either. It will flow sometimes and it wont. I spend 2 weeks and get nothing then I passed out for five minutes in class and failed a test writing a song. Just be ready in case that little tick of idea comes

    Fuck inspiration too... if you werent inspired you wouldnt even be writing in the first place right?
     
  3. mkc414

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    Maybe dont take it so seriously. I was in a pretty good band a few years ago with a ton of instrumental songs, and I think my own attachment to many of them made it harder to write lyrics and vocal parts. My favorite lyricist is Maynard from Tool/APC. If you go back to their earlier songs, I think a lot of the vocals and lyrics werent as refined then as they are these days (my sig is from "Reflection"). I think my point is that becoming really good at anything is a long road and maybe your first songs/lyrics will really suck, but your band will keep writing new music and youll have chances to get better.

    To find your own voice for anything I think is to reach into yourself without fear or judgement. Cheers,

    MKC
     
  4. baboonus_galactus

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    Most of my lyrics just start out with two lines that rhyme. Listen to the music and try to find melodies that you can put words on. Two lines that rhyme is a great start, just add two more and you've got a verse (at least if you ain't Bob-Fucking-Dylan). Doing drugs usually helps too :)
     
  5. assfucksohard

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    haha thanks alot guys
     
  6. Sax_Machine

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    Interesting that you like to do it that way around, and I've talked to other people who do to, but I would have thought it would be easier to write words from scratch given free reign of all things related to form, structure, scansion etc. Also I think it's far easier to define words with music than to define music with words, but then that is maybe because I'm a musician and not a wordsmith.

    I'm useless at lyrics, I don't even try any more, but I can do music and I like to set other people's lyrics. I posted a song in another forum on here that came about through a friend writing soem words one depressed night and asking me to set them for her. I'll post the words and a lead sheet for the vocal line and chord symbols and a midi file, please let me know what you think.

    Two ears, a nose, a pair of eyes
    Just like a normal being
    The pain that burns deep down inside
    I keep the world from seeing
    If I let my emotions free
    And showed the world my soul
    All blissful things would cease to be
    While darkness takes control

    The sun, it fades, and dusk sets in
    My heart, it fills with dread
    When darkness falls, my fears begin
    To circle around my head

    Optimistic thoughts set sail
    Melancholy ones prevail
    The workings of my broken mind
    Think, “Why is this world so unkind?”
    My tears, they make a sea of woe
    A mirror for a blank tomorrow
    It makes me feel so cold, so blue
    But I can’t stop thinking of you

    Maybe I should just forget
    Disregard the day we met
    Erase your smile from my brain
    And not think of your eyes again
    I try, but you’re all that I see
    The cause of all my misery
    It’s too strong in my memory
    That fateful day when you left me…
     
  7. baboonus_galactus

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    I'm a musican as well, but sometimes there is a kind of melody in the lyrics themselves. I usually just try to write new lyrics to other peoples stuff and the guitarist/singer in my band usually already has a basic melody-thing going on anyway..so we just adopt the lyrics/melodies to the already written music. But that's just US.
     
  8. assfucksohard

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    I really like the poem, and the music you wrote for it. Good job. I know what you mean too, like certain words fit with a certain mood of the music.
     
  9. Sax_Machine

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    Cheers. What sort of style do you write/play? Anything like that?
     
  10. TenCentArcade

    TenCentArcade Banned

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    I posted in DarkLunacy's thread on this topic. This is what I said:


    I write songs as well.

    First, I open up Microsoft Works. Then I write with my heart, but that doesn't mean I write free-form crap.

    Lyrics are very difficult to write, because you have to have a structure and rhythm, otherwise it won't work. So I write with my heart, and write whatever comes from my finger tips.

    Now, bad writers stop there. Bad writers take what was written with pure emotion and call it complete. But this usually results in crap.

    First, write with your heart. Then, write with your mind.
    So every song I write goes through a couple or a few drafts, and then I post it here or something.

    Haven't posted in a while because there's been a lack of inspiration.

    But, here are my two most recent songs:


    "Lost Ways of Wonderment"

    Crept barefoot across
    A sea of frozen roses
    All the qualms of your
    Certain qualities
    How do they manage
    To remain so fair?
    Where have they been adorned?

    Breathing the times
    With glamour eyes
    Seething bitterness
    Of the midnight cold
    It’s more than has been
    Revealed in this sky
    The blunt ends of
    What disappears

    Arose from edges of
    Sharpened disbelief
    Disarmed the Armageddon
    Of murderous world
    When did they create
    What they imagined?
    What was said of antiquity?

    Where unrequited words
    Are rigorous and bold
    I’ll fall for truth tonight
    Where romanticism is
    All the lies of its heart
    I’ll fall for fools tonight
    Where uncertainty roams
    In lack of lust for life
    I’ll fall for you tonight

    Breathing the times
    With glamour eyes
    Seething bitterness
    Of the midnight cold
    It’s more than has been
    Revealed in this sky
    The blunt ends of
    What disappears


    Notice how it very clearly has verses and a chorus and a bridge. That is what makes it a song, and that is what makes songs difficult to write.

    My second most recent is a bit more complex. Inspired by the ideas behind songs such as Smashing Pumpkins' "Glass and the Ghost Children", it is actually several songs in one.

    "Silence"

    Figures of lamenting dreams
    The slumber lost to age
    And what was thought to be
    Was sought to free the truth
    Hidden beneath the saviors
    Of the musicality of youth
    Oh, what nights have murdered
    The nightmares we dream of

    In her Underworld
    Spiders play her tune
    Her humble reign heals
    Nostalgic remnants
    In her Underworld
    She's so fast, so cruel
    In her Underworld
    She's just broken glass

    What constant fervor have
    Solved such winded ways?
    Is change change at all
    If change is all she’s had?
    Living between hurried gasps of
    Idle smoke-screen machines
    Oh, how we surrender
    To nightmares we dream of

    In her Underworld
    Spiders play her tune
    Her humble reign heals
    Nostalgic remnants
    In her Underworld
    She's so fast, so cruel
    In her Underworld
    She's just broken glass

    --

    Climbed your two-tone smile
    Leapt across a lover’s lie of
    Words escaping pad-locked kisses
    The fiction you swore upon
    Is it true you’re stifled?
    Is it true you’ve saved
    All the trite of your hidden ways?

    --

    Sucking up the sky
    In wisps of sacrament
    Leaning together to
    Trap the lightning kiss
    Children mustn’t devour
    What’s left of suffrages
    So sweet, so mild
    So barren in their years

    As much as she thinks
    Nitrate dreams dissolve
    These blue skies turned
    Her black with envy
    And what’s left is all
    She had in the beginning

    Whites spiders rolling from
    The tongues of her guilt
    Effigies burning bright
    In the gut of her grace
    Children mustn’t devour
    Such creed of calamity
    So feared, so loved
    So arid in these times

    As much as she thinks
    Nitrate dreams dissolve
    She’s bottled the shears
    Of warnings she’s ignored
    And what’s left is all
    She had in the beginning

    --

    Healed for nothing better
    Than the heart stain you fled
    Spat the shit of make-believe
    The fairy tale ending you fought
    Is it true you’re stifled?
    Is it true you’re staid
    From the boredom of wonderment?

    --

    If I were dead
    Would you be listless?
    Would that jagged heart
    You claim to release
    Be beating all the same
    Or would you unbridle
    What you’ve tucked away?

    Men in lemon lab coats
    Trapping thunder
    Leaning together
    And short of breath
    Screaming at the weather
    It never quits raining

    You counted each flake
    That fell inside your fleeting
    Abyss of all you’ll need
    Where were your heroes
    You claimed to worship?
    Where were your spiders
    You claimed to eat?

    Men in lemon lab coats
    Trapping thunder
    Leaning together
    And short of breath
    Screaming at the weather
    It never quits raining

    She counted each flake
    That fell inside her
    She counted each flake
    That fell inside her
    She counted each flake
    That fell inside her
    She counted each flake
    That fell inside her

    --

    Boiled festers of youth
    Buried in the trenches dug
    To be devoured by fate
    The hunger of the unscathed
    Is it true you’re stifled
    Is it true you’ve saved
    Every bit of sentimentality?

    --

    Despite the ever-lasting
    The last desires of her heart
    And for all her synthetic flesh
    What’s too true is too far away
    Who wouldn’t save this child
    From all she has borne?
    Who wouldn’t find this child
    A thousand stars to call her own?
    What is lost is found
    What she lost is home


    Once again, notice the verses and choruses of each song, along with the bridges connecting each song. Also notice the "outro" at the end.


    Listening to modern music, it seems lyrics have become a lost art. And this is partially why I strive to write excellent lyrics. As Ghandi said, "Be the change you want to see in the world."
     
  11. Sax_Machine

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    The other downside of not being very good with lyrics is it makes it difficult to appreciate them.

    Do you set your own lyrics as well, TenCentArcade? Do you have any musical ideas in mind when you write them? Or a particular style at least? Or do you come to that once the words are finished?
     
  12. assfucksohard

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    i like that idea, of just writing what you are thinking, then fine tuning it. And i agree that lyrics have become a lost art. I feel like i have something good inside, but i need a way to gt it out. thanks alot man.
     
  13. TenCentArcade

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    I'm teaching myself guitar and piano, but I'm unfortunately not far enough along in either to write many songs, although I have written one or two.
     
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