Anti-war poem/lyrics

This is my newest one... I'm constantly writing. Enjoy! It's called Peace Takes Courage, Too.

Take your place, you big disgrace
I thought I raised you right.
Take your stand and be a man
Your duty is to fight.
Freedom don't come free, you know.
I'm not about to let it go.
How dare you tell me no?
But mama I don't want to die
Or kill another man.
Don't want to fight, 'cause it ain't right
So hear me if you can.
They're spreading fear accross the lands
While blood is spilling on their hands.
How dare you make me go?
Well if you flee, be gone from me
You've wandered out of line.
You know your place, you big disgrace
And you're no son of mine.
But mama, there's another way.
If there'll be peace on earth someday
We must begin today.
I believe from my heart and I won't be a part of this madness!
What we're losing in lives the surviving are gaining in sadness!
Well peace takes courage, too.
Take your gun, you'd better run
Your nation is in need.
Take your stand and be a man
Your debt will soon be freed.
Freedom don't come free, you see.
I'm not about to let it be.
Don't make a fool of me!
Bub mama, I don't want to die
The propaganda lied.
Don't want to be no war machine
No tool of foolish pride.
With thousands dead throughout the lands
No blood is spilling on my hands.
Don't make a pawn of me!
Well if you flee, be gone for me
And drown in all your shame.
You've lost your place, you big disgrace!
Got no one else to blame.
But mama, there's another way.
If we might learn to love someday
We must begin today.
I believe from my heart and I won't be a part of this madness!
What we're losing in lives the surviving are gaining in sadness!
Well peace take courage, too.


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that's actually pretty good. Keep up the good work.

 

Thank you so much. I'm really trying. I want to inspire people someday.

 

Out of all the shit that I occasionally read in this forum... this actually stood out... very very impressive writing for your age, other than some forces rhymes, this song is rather very good.

 

Wow. Thanks for the positive feedback!! I hope your right. Lol

 

I agree, its very good. My only gripe is the forced rhymes, which I'm guilty of using as well.

 

i also agree


especially with brave sir rubin

 

Hehe yeah. It's my obsessiveness. I hate it when the rhythm's not perfect. It gets me frustrated. I like my lyrics to be nice, not just the song. I'm a little obsessive-compulsive when it comes to that. I try not to be, but I can't help it -grrrrrrr-

 

It was pretty good, a fun read. But yeah forced ryhmes suck, you know its lame when you write it is the worst part.

 

True.

 

beautiful. i love it. nice work, woodstock.

 

thanks

 

Wow, I'm impressed. I wish I could write like that. Stuck doing free-form poetry here.

 

I just love writing. Period.