Splintered mirror

I'm a broken rainbow,
made from shattered sunlight
and torn raindrops.

Empty dreams filled
with lies and
cloudy skies.

My mollified hopes
have been slewn
by the one person
who means the most.

I feel like I am looking
through a splintered mirror,
seeing only myself
and the spider-like cracks.

Peace and love

 

That's amazing.

 

yes, far out, i like it a lot, the rythm is really good, and the structure is fantastic, one thing, rain drop is 2 words

 

I like it. It's good to see someone who can write poetry with succinctness - it adds elegance.


Is it about a relationship gone bad?

 

It's about a relationship going through rough times, although things are looking a lot better. Mostly, it's about the depression I felt about the whole situation.

Thanks for the replies! More to come soon!

Peace and love

 

Where do broken dreams
and shattered hopes die?

Do they disintegrate into
a pile of ashes and drown
within the depths of our soul?

We grieve every day
for our destroyed hopes and dreams,
festering within our hearts.

We look into the shattered mirror
and what do we see?
Only ourselves and our buried sorrows,
hidden out of other's sights.

Peace and Love

 

How strange it is, the way
we seek a permanent joy
in the arms of the fleeting...

It is like a child who yearns
to play catch with the moon
and cries when she cannot reach it.

 

I'm walking on a sea of shattered dreams
mostly mine but some of yours
thoughts we had about the future
and our lives together
but now I'm getting second thoughts.

I can't deal with this pain every day,
inflicted by that angered word
or thoughtless remark.

It's time for me to move on to better places
and travel a road that has never been taken.



To you: I don't know what to do anymore. I love you very much. Thanks for reading this. I will miss you someday. I'm not strong enough today.

Peace and love

 

You are the traveler and the road
you are the destiny and the haven
you are the song of the infinite soul
you are greater than the highest heaven.

 

all of them are very good. bravo.

 

Hmmm... if you actually tore a raindrop, wouldn't you just get two raindrops, and not a single broken one? I mean, I don't think a raindrop has to conform to any specific size to be referred to as a raindrop.

And shattered sunlight... I think that something actually has to have tangibility before it can be shattered! Like glass can be shattered, and rock can shatter...

Your poetry completely confounds me!

 

Good job!

Does it really matter? It's poetry not a scientifical text!

 

I hope you're joking.

 

He isn't. He said in another thread he hated poetry yet he posts here...

 

You are the mist that hovers above,

for which the water holds only sympathy.

There all tangably touching,
what adacity to tell another how to feel, or express..............

D. Knight ~

 

I agree, the images are dazzling in their painful beauty.

 

Very nice!

 

Thanks for all the kind replies. I appreciate the feedback on my poetry.

Peace and love

 

The smoke by the mirror has cleared
and I can finally see clearly again.
I don't need you in my life
Although it would be nice,
but nice things don't always happen
and misery is all I feel.
Nothing can take that pain away,
no amount of alcohol or any other drug,
can save me from my river of pain,
which I am drowning in.

But fuck it, I'm stronger than this!
I don't need anyone else to hold me up;
I can stand on my own two feet.
My love was my pain, but not anymore.
I've doubled in strength at the least.
I have had better days
but I think the worst are behind me.

Peace and love

 

Nice one, hippiechick. This poem deserves the amount of feedback it's gotten