My first short story. Enjoy.. or don't.

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what an excellent story, it really only could have been better if Mr Williams had masturbated over the soufle and then sat bare-arsed on a tray of chocholate cream eclairs while singing "hail to the cheif"

Remarkable ! have you ever thought of becoming a genius - the pay is excellent and the only drawback is that you need to publish at least 5 other similarly clever works

 

Mojo you have talent. I love the irony of the story. Ten years ago it would have been considered an Alternative Comedy of Manners. Nowadays, it classifies as a British Slice of Life.

 

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Nice interesting black twist Mojo Risin'. I'd like more character development for Mrs Williams, and Mr Patterson and maybe some allusion to what they shared before. Something twisted.