Song I made the other day, whatcha think?

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by badmilk, Dec 17, 2006.

  1. badmilk

    badmilk Member

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    Alright I wrote this for the guitar, and hopefully after xmas I'll be able to upload it to my computer for you guys to hear. Let me know what you think :)

    Hey you there traveler of the open roads
    hey you who are released and free
    hey you where you goin whatcha doin with your life
    and hey you would mind on takin me?

    well first let me say, this life isn't for everybody
    but its encoded in my spirit and its for me
    and if you wanna tag along, then help me sing this song
    and we'll travel as the souls that just had to be free.

    hey you where are we goin?
    hey you what seeds are we sowin'?
    well we're goin where we want and we're sowin seeds of peace
    lift your hands up to the sky and your soul will be released
    you can fly like the eagle
    you can run like the wolf
    you can run through the forests
    you can wade in the brooks


    The part thats bolded I'm not sure if I should say hands or head, I'm trying to get a feeling of freedom across with that line, and the song isn't finished yet so got any ideas for good lines or anything let me know :)
     
  2. Flowers In My Hair

    Flowers In My Hair Spontaneous Joy

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    I like it just the way it is. 'lift your hands up to the sky'
    I can't wait to hear it!
     
  3. sentient

    sentient Senior Member

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    sounds like some hippy wailing on about their dismal life
     

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