You didn't even know

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by kwal30, Dec 26, 2006.

  1. kwal30

    kwal30 Member

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    i wish i could ask you the questions you dont want to hear
    i wish you could give me the answers that i want to hear
    you know the questions and i know the answers
    but i can't help but feeling there must be another way
    the truth hurts too much
    there must be another way
    i've never let the truth hurt this much before
    but now i cant bear it

    you fucked up my mind
    but you didn't mean it
    you broke my heart
    but you didnt even know it
    how could i feel this way
    and you dont even sense it
    is my life set up for purgatory
    will i be in limbo all this time
    is there someone to save me
    is there anybody there
    i thought it was you
    but you didnt even know


    I've never really been one to write much. After discovering that a girl I care very much about was with another guy I felt the need to write and just started and this is what came out.
     
  2. mastermemei

    mastermemei Member

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    unrequited love, hurts like hell.
    it kills you everyday and nobody knows it but you

    be well soon

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  3. deram_scholzara

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    a fantastic representation of the feeling of betrayal in relationships. You express it very well and intensely. I can't help thinking that if it were shorter, though, that the poem would show more of the brisk sternness of just wanting to smack the person to their senses... something that should obviously never be done, but you can't help the feeling of it.
     
  4. 90 paces west

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    Oh my god this poem. Is amazing. Im feeling the same way right now. It does hurt.. A lot... And I wish I was able to just tell him how much he hurt me. But I cant...
    :/
    Beautiful poem by the way.
    :]
     
  5. kwal30

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    I really don't feel like she betrayed me though even though it may seem that way from what I wrote. She has no loyalty to me. Were not together and never have been. As far as I know she doesnt even know how I feel about her. It was just the thought and sight of her with someone else that made me write this.
     

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