this is my bullshit poem

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by teh-horace, Jan 24, 2007.

  1. teh-horace

    teh-horace for your pleasure

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    this is a whole bunch of bullshit, basically, that fell out of my fingertips, or at first my right hand, that is also to say, it's up for critique



    I don't know how to tie my shoes
    with my eyes closed and my hands
    tied behind my back like two
    cobras mingling, tangled, and charmed
    beneath the lull of the charmer's
    flute that exhales a beautiful noise
    and renders music in the ears
    of these serpents that allow me to
    free myself from incongruent jigsaw
    puzzles of imprisoned fairty tales
    where little red riding hood is full
    of lust and power, oh the lasciviousness
    of that impression I left in the
    sand as I stepped down, one foot
    in front of another with shoe strings
    freed like two cobras released from
    daze as days pass and the charmer
    sleeps his eyes awake and asleep
    watching and not watching his hands
    and fingers caress the phallic reed
    he presses his lips against symbolically
    to release and imprison the bones
    and ligaments of his human manipulating
    tools that case civilization to rise
    and fall as suns set below sight
    and my shoes remain untied


    -rdw 1/18/07
     
  2. bruschetta

    bruschetta Member

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    that was fucking awesome man! best thing ive read all day! maybe all week...

    kinda got lost at the little red riding hood part though
     
  3. Justagrrl420

    Justagrrl420 Member

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    i liked it..very interesting..i liked the parts about the cobra..
     
  4. teh-horace

    teh-horace for your pleasure

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    i think it's crazy

    i dunno
     

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