Precision

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by CrucifiedDreams, Jan 29, 2007.

  1. CrucifiedDreams

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    Call it uncertainty
    Call it a choice without reflection
    Call it spontaneity
    Call it hunger
    Or passion
    Or maybe love
    Call it self-determination
    Call it warm hands on a cold night
    Call it a bitter tease
    Call it incrimination

    Take your left hand
    Place it over your heart
    Call that feeling aspiration
    Take the chemicals bubbling through your nervous system
    Call that feeling chemistry
    Take the past surging through your brain
    Wrapped around your spinal cord
    Call that feeling a flash back
    Take the bottle and position it downward
    Call that feeling free at last
    Free at last

    Take the last leap
    Call it faith
    Call it spontaneity
    Call it a choice without reflection
    Call it uncertainty
    Or just maybe
    You can call it

    Precision
     
  2. unknown2012

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    ooo i like it lots :) made me think about love and also addictions. wow lol it made me think about alot of things.. very very nice job :)

    what were you mostly thinking about when you wrote it?
     
  3. Radiation

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    Obviously you are much better with words than I am, so I'll just say...very nice.
     
  4. natural philosophy

    natural philosophy bitchass sexual chocolate

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    great visual imagery. References to the brain, nervous system, spinal cord, etc. also made me think of an addiction, but it also made me think of lost love. 'warm hands on a cold night' or 'a choice without reflection' are good images of love.
     
  5. CrucifiedDreams

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    Thanks guys :)

    I was thinking about love and addiction. You got it.
     
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