oh I think it's time for a global over haul of positive changin I think we're past the due-date for some major re-arranging theres too much anger too much hate, too much sadness too much fear, too much fightin too many wars too many times over too many years too much left wing, and too much right too much darkness, not enough light theres not enough laughing not enough giving not enough singin about our pain not enough smiling not enough huggin not enough dancin' in the rain not enough playin like the old days when we didn't have a care and if we ever re-connect I hope I'll see you there because now is the time for revoultion we are sitting on the brink of either disaster or evolution it's time to stand up it's time to talk back it's time to spread peace from here to there it's time to do drugs it's time to get laid it's time to grow out that hippy hair we have to be strong we can't give in we can't start this world over again but we can change it for the better if you care and I hope you do because now is the time for revoultion we are sitting on the brink of either disaster or evolution I just made it about 10 minutes ago, if you like it feel free to use it and have it it's yours just curious as to what people think, any recommendations or whatever. Love and good feelings from north cali Chad
I liked it, and the message. The only recomendation I could add would be to leave it alone for a while without reading or thinking about it. Come back to it a few weeks later and read it over, usualy there will be a few ways you could make it flow better. Just be careful not to fix something that isn't broken PEACE
Alright awesome thanks, and what was it you didn't like about the message? Any criticisms or suggestions are nice, you aren't writing the song for me but I love to know what people think