My new song lyrics (let me know whatcha think)

oh I think it's time for a global over haul of positive changin
I think we're past the due-date for some major re-arranging

theres too much
anger too much
hate, too much
sadness too much
fear, too much
fightin too many wars
too many times
over too many years
too much left wing, and too much right

too much darkness, not enough light

theres not enough
laughing not enough
giving not enough
singin about our pain
not enough smiling
not enough huggin
not enough dancin' in the rain
not enough playin like the old days when we didn't have a care
and if we ever re-connect I hope I'll see you there

because now is the time for revoultion
we are sitting on the brink of either disaster or evolution

it's time to stand up
it's time to talk back
it's time to spread peace from here to there
it's time to do drugs
it's time to get laid
it's time to grow out that hippy hair

we have to be strong
we can't give in
we can't start this world over again
but we can change it for the better if you care
and I hope you do

because now is the time for revoultion
we are sitting on the brink of either disaster or evolution


I just made it about 10 minutes ago, if you like it feel free to use it and have it it's yours just curious as to what people think, any recommendations or whatever.

Love and good feelings from north cali
Chad

 

It could be catchy, but I dislike the message.

 

I liked it, and the message.

The only recomendation I could add would be to leave it alone for a while without reading or thinking about it. Come back to it a few weeks later and read it over, usualy there will be a few ways you could make it flow better. Just be careful not to fix something that isn't broken

PEACE

 

Alright awesome thanks, and what was it you didn't like about the message? Any criticisms or suggestions are nice, you aren't writing the song for me but I love to know what people think