My new song lyrics (let me know whatcha think)

Discussion in 'Music' started by badmilk, Feb 5, 2007.

  1. badmilk

    badmilk Member

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    oh I think it's time for a global over haul of positive changin
    I think we're past the due-date for some major re-arranging

    theres too much
    anger too much
    hate, too much
    sadness too much
    fear, too much
    fightin too many wars
    too many times
    over too many years
    too much left wing, and too much right

    too much darkness, not enough light

    theres not enough
    laughing not enough
    giving not enough
    singin about our pain
    not enough smiling
    not enough huggin
    not enough dancin' in the rain
    not enough playin like the old days when we didn't have a care
    and if we ever re-connect I hope I'll see you there

    because now is the time for revoultion
    we are sitting on the brink of either disaster or evolution

    it's time to stand up
    it's time to talk back
    it's time to spread peace from here to there
    it's time to do drugs
    it's time to get laid
    it's time to grow out that hippy hair

    we have to be strong
    we can't give in
    we can't start this world over again
    but we can change it for the better if you care
    and I hope you do

    because now is the time for revoultion
    we are sitting on the brink of either disaster or evolution



    I just made it about 10 minutes ago, if you like it feel free to use it and have it it's yours :) just curious as to what people think, any recommendations or whatever.

    Love and good feelings from north cali :)
    Chad
     
  2. BraveSirRubin

    BraveSirRubin Members

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    It could be catchy, but I dislike the message.
     
  3. LetLovinTakeHold

    LetLovinTakeHold Cuz it will if you let it

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    I liked it, and the message.

    The only recomendation I could add would be to leave it alone for a while without reading or thinking about it. Come back to it a few weeks later and read it over, usualy there will be a few ways you could make it flow better. Just be careful not to fix something that isn't broken

    PEACE
     
  4. badmilk

    badmilk Member

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    Alright awesome thanks, and what was it you didn't like about the message? Any criticisms or suggestions are nice, you aren't writing the song for me but I love to know what people think :)
     

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