I look into your eyes

from post I look into your eyes to see a stream that moves like the drifting incense smoke as it heaves up your nose exploring your heart where cute bunnys play pool in love child manner heres to your lemonade that danced on a spire of daffadols and left pink flufflydice

 

and they say you shouldnt do lsd for what reasons.....

 

everyone always assumes drugs lol anyone can write that without being on anything, its so much fun lol

 

i was enjoying this until the smoke heaved up my nose

 

how dare you condmen such a beautiful thing!

 

Beautiful. I love the way you write. You and I should collaberate. We'd make amazing poetry together. Much Love to You )

 

loveflower you make me laugh lol ImaginePeace1969 that sounds like a fun idea I did that once marque who I went to school well it was a conversation through poems he would write one then I would write a reply back we wasted a period doing that lol

 

dammit, why did you have to go and say such a thing?


Purple burnt whatever, its great that you write and all but your writing really, really sucks. I havent read much poetry, but more than other dudes my age, but yours just really really sucks.

 

soulrebel51 prejudice is ignorance

 

Im not being prejudiced, im telling you your poems suck ass. Because they do. It would be ignorant if I were to say that without reading your poems, but unfortunately i did. and they really really suck.

 

I write little things like this and poems {this was not a poem} in a modern abstract style I leave out most things so it is like two people in a building both will see the same thing but get different things as it doesn't tell you it asks what you see and what you see is a reflection of you, this is my final reply to you on the subject of my writings

 

that wasnt writing abstractly....it was writing like crap to try and get attention. if it was writing abstractly, well then you really sucked at it because i too write abstractly when i do write, but that hasnt been for a while. and being a writer myself, that gives me the authority to say your writing sucks. but hey mine suck for the most part too, and thats why i never post any.

 

anything that you express from your truest self will always end up beautiful


i remember saying to my friends that i am riding on a sponge made of pink water and i went down a waterfall where as soon as i get to the otherside everything turned into fig neutens.....but their apricot neutens


they told me to shut up, i told them to open their eyes

excellent expression....peace be with you

 

there is nothing wrong with saying that if youre high, or if you say that every now and then....but when you say it over and over and over to get attention then someone needs to say something or it will never end.

 

everyone posts to get attention lol why the hell else would you post, you have something to share/express you hope someone will like it and reply to it, if no one replys to it why would you bother so if you don't like it then why are you encouraging me by posting a reply by posting again you have helped to post to stay current

 

if you couldnt tell by the replies, we are encouraging you to not write anymore. unless you can come up with a poem that makes sense and doesnt suck.

 

Well, if you don't like what he's saying, then useing the power of free will- DON'T READ IT. My thought is- if you don't liek it, whya re you putting yourself throught hemotions of reading it, and then wastign yoru time telling him hwo much it sucks and hurting his feelings? Where's the purpose there- it just sees like a lot more work for someone who didn't like anything about the poem int he first place

BTW- I didn't leave- I had to go to the hospital

 

ok, well im totally lost now on this little bicker fest i have been witnessing but i would like to say that i enjoyed reading the poetry or little story thing whatever it was, because as i read i could visualize happy things and it put a smile on my face. thank you, post them more often, nobody is forced to read them remember.

 

thanks Jennyflower I'm glad you liked it

 

HAHAHAHHAA. hahaha. haha. ha. I love you. I guess it's prejudice...against things that suck.

Purple, I don't usually just make an effort to point out what someone has written is terrible... I don't want to be mean or make anyone feel bad. Usually.

Constructive criticism is usually the only type worth speaking, because if it doesn't help them to make whatever shit it was better, then, what's the point?

I will tell you. To vanquish it from existence. To kill it and restore the earth to it's former ignorant state of such .... well, I'll refrain right there.

I'm not saying "you are not beautiful," or, "you cannot express yourself," because I'm sure you are and have the ability to write something worth the effort of writing it.

Perhaps you were trying to have a positive, happy effect on people? It's fine and good to try and create something beautiful and unreal, even, GROOVY, if I dare say, but, you failed. And I can reasonably assume that the negative effect you have inspired in me is of a far greater magnitude than any warm lala land feelings you stimulated in anyone else.

By the way, I did choose not to read it for a long time, but finally I did read a couple of the responses and had to see what was going on. It's not that I'm angry I had to read it, I'm angry you allowed it to exist, and my having read it does not change that fact. If this pisses you off, apply your own logic. And if you really want, ignore me and go write more shit. Free expression card trumps all, but realize that counts for the rest of us too.