is this good or just self pity bullshit? be honest, please!

a world explodes in my mind
a fiery display of hate and anger
their hypocracy tears my mind's defenses
and i am left crippled again

why do they hate me so much
i don't understand what i've done
this hate seems so undeserved
have i offended them somehow

they're telling me to sell out
to become one with the crowd
to sell my soul to the ones i hate
and be a drone and just play along

i don't want to but they're all screaming
they yell and they point their fingers
i have to go through this myself
these teenage years

they say in thirty years it won't matter
i know that so shut the fuck up
but i don't care about thirty years
because i'm living in the here and now

 

its kind of cool...once you read it a couple times and get used to it.

 

I think it's good.

 

yay thanx. lol.

 

this is cool i like it

 

Well written, as in your full aware of what your going thru-

"And these children that you spit on
are well aware of what their going through"
David Bowie ~

 

insightful, not necessarily the most beautifully written though

 

definately good
really paints a clear picture of the strugles u go thru

 

"A world explodes in my mind"-powerful! You have some good stuff here...you're fourteen and going through a bunch of shit right now, obviously. This is what you feel, it could never be "self-pity bull shit," there are no rules in poetry. Just keep, keepin' it real!

 

its really good

 

thank you all =)