can I take you there

its been a while since I've last been on here...and slowly I'm starting to write more again. this one is called can I take you there. I dont know if I like it just the way it is or if I'm going to add more to it and make it a longer poem. Any kind of feedback would be nice and greatly appreciated.

theres a place that I know
where you often love to go
leave all your troubles behind
let your life begin to unwind
where you can rest without a care
if you let me, can I take you there??

 

beautiful and simple and my kind of poem

You should definitely add more , try describing that place.

 

its good...i agree with CrystalShip if u want to make it longer try describing that place