My life

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Freakymetalchik, Jun 26, 2007.

  1. Freakymetalchik

    Freakymetalchik BITCH.

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    im staring at your face now
    remembering all the times i
    wanted nothing more than to
    SHOVE
    that stupid empty bottle down
    your throat and watch you choke
    and watch you die i cant remember
    when i last smiled at you or when
    was the last time that i was really
    HAPPY

    but now all i can remember of the
    earlier years of my childhood are
    pain misery and anguish and all of it
    is kept inside this cage of rage that is my
    MIND
    you screwed up and the result was me
    every second i live is a second that youre
    reminded that you screw up that you had love
    and you lost it im that piece that never was quite
    RIGHT

    take out all your anger all your frustration
    on me because its what you do its what youve
    always done im used to it by now scars on the inside
    and the out half healed but never really will all i can
    THINK
    of is slitting you open and laughing as you die but
    that wishful dream fades into reality and youre
    standing in front of me drunk again all i can do to
    stop myself from slitting my own throat open is to
    pour out my soul on paper and hope theres something
    BETTER.
     
  2. blackheartbitch

    blackheartbitch Member

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    this beautiful and i know exactly what u mean gurl
     
  3. Gothika

    Gothika Member

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    very nice poem
     
  4. The Instinct

    The Instinct Member

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    damn girl, I know exactly how you feel in this poem. Just have to express what parents really do to their children and upsettingly most don't want to accept the responsibility what they have caused.
     
  5. Hope_B

    Hope_B Member

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    very nice ... u realy expressed alot of a kept feelings
     
  6. RexLee

    RexLee Banned

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    wow teh feelings really showed through, i really enjoyed reading it
     
  7. redyelruc

    redyelruc The Yard Man

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    Well FMC,
    I had a bit of time on my hands and went snooping around in the backpages of this forum. Guess what I found? This has some of the best turns of phrase that i've seen you use. I feel it.

    What a great expression, this cage of rage. You have a way with words. They jump off the page and grab me by the scruff of the neck, demanding that I listen............


    Great. Give it to her. The truth hurts.

    There is something better, be sure.

    Peace,
    Aidan.
     
  8. Freakymetalchik

    Freakymetalchik BITCH.

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    jim kirby Member

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  10. Freakymetalchik

    Freakymetalchik BITCH.

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    oh there u are! thanks :) lol
     

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