Suicide Note (untitled)

Barrel to temple, not long left now.....

12 months of pointless one-night stands, countless shitty bands
Full of half-assed attempts at reconcilliation in full-blown inebriation,
That one long conversation......
And then so many unanswered calls, punched walls and drunken falls.
Nothing can stop my self-condemnation.
I've tried it all...........
Meditation, medication, even psychiatric evaluation
But you're still there.

You've left me, but you just won't leave me alone.
You're memory's a cancer, It's gnawing at my bones.
I've heard them all........
First opinions, second opinions and now I hear the devil's minions.
They've come to take me home,
To free me from this living hell.
But unlike my chance with you,
I won't fuck this up, Michelle.

Goodbye my love, I'm sorry............
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Please post a comment or especially a criticism. I want to know what you think.

Peace,
Aidan.

 

that was great. it flowed very nicely. good job!

 

free you from living hell.

I like that part.
Acceptance is key, my friend..
the first half is brilliant were detached, but then I thought you got very touchy in the second half.

 

Hi TwoRupeeSoul,
Thanks for taking the time to read my piece and for your comments. I think the end is a little personal too and wasn't too sure about it. But, it is a suicide note.... Shouldn't it be personal??

Peace,
Aidan.

 

I've always thought a note like that would be the ultimate f*** you (can't remember if they encourage sensorship on here),but as I've learnt over the countless heartbreaks of my life,in the end self-annihilation is only their victory.

 

loved it, awsome

 

brilliant poem

 

Thanks for taking the time to read it......

Peace,
Aidan

 

wow that was amazing and the flow was just perfect!

 

Thanks LakeofFire. Glad you liked it.

 

pretty darn good. I feel the same many a times. Good job man.

 

oh wow that was amazing...ur flow is great

 

DONT DO IT! jk that was really great

 

Great poem! But why did you say it's untitled? Suicide Note - that's the title right there.

 

The pain was real, thank you for sharing this with us.

 

wow, thats all i can say.

 

Thanks Musikero for the vote of confidence on the spotlight thingy. I'm glad you like it. You're right, I think I'll just call it suicide note from now on.


Thanks also to all of you who took the time to read this poem and/or post a comment.

Peace,
Aidan.

 

Aidan,
That was a powerful read.
Sounds like you lived much of it, in order to convey such moving, gripping feelings.
Very emotional, even gut wrenching.
Excelent work.
Keep it up.

 

Unfortunately, I have lived/am still living it. All the old cliches about heartbreak are alive and well in my daily life. It's not fun..... but it's reAL.

Anyway, glad you enjoyed the read. It helped me a lot to write it.

Peace,
Aidan

 

your not acually going to use that are you?
and its wonderful. the personal touch at the end balances the whole poem.
peace