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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by pocketmouse014, Aug 3, 2007.

  1. pocketmouse014

    pocketmouse014 Member

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    dont be so quick to judge others.
    who cares if they were raised by two mothers
    who cares if they have to many lovers
    and who cares what they do under covers.
    who cares if they choose to never eat
    who cares if fat covers their feet
    who cares if they look parcially insane
    and who cares if what they wear is just lame.
    why worry about what they choose to believe
    why worry if its non-sence they heave
    if enlightenment is their wish to achive
    dont be rude and get up and leave.
    just respect the actions people make
    dont throw your dumb darts of hate
    because when you throw those darts at their hearts
    it slowy tears me apart.
    it slowy enrages my mind
    dont treat people so fucking unkind
    dont treat people so fucking rude
    it puts everyone in a bad mood
    it put everyone in a bad place
    just slow down your pace pf hate and chill out...
    your vision of reality needs a tighter grip
    im sick of all the bum trips....


    what do you think?
     
  2. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    love it, very open-minded :)
     
  3. pocketmouse014

    pocketmouse014 Member

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    lol thank you.
     
  4. Freakymetalchik

    Freakymetalchik BITCH.

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    I like this poem! :)
     
  5. Freakymetalchik

    Freakymetalchik BITCH.

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  6. redyelruc

    redyelruc The Yard Man

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    Great Work!! I think its super.


    Peace,
    Aidan
     
  7. pocketmouse014

    pocketmouse014 Member

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    aww thanks so much
     
  8. Chess Hotel

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    It seems kind of like a list with a jagged flow to it, but I actually like that aspect a lot. I'm not a big fan of forced rhyming either, but I think in this rare case, I can appreciate both aspects because that was a damn awesome poem :)

    Keep up the good work!
     
  9. pocketmouse014

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    big fan of forced rhyming haha
    i tend to do that a little and i dont mean to lol
    "a list with a jagged flow"
    lol
    i appreciate everything u just told me :)
     
  10. Malapascua

    Malapascua Member

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    It is great
     
  11. pocketmouse014

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  14. Jack Maundrell

    Jack Maundrell C.A.P

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    relax just do it if ya wanna go through it. cool
     
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