So Steep In Your Occurence

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by just_poetic, Aug 8, 2007.

  1. just_poetic

    just_poetic Member

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    Nemesis: Sunsets assumed the shape of love encased in cocoons,
    crescent moons, consumed thoughts and allowed them to bloom,
    within this midst we arose, juxtaposed and unclothed,
    eternities prose perched on time as it froze, - and here we are
    members of a moment that's been captured, similar to your gaze and your rapture
    I need - to be freed, the seed has already been planted,
    past loves recanted, the breezes have chanted


    Poetic: I'm weak wheneva i look into ur eyes
    i reminisce of humid nights an' starry skies
    everything abruptly stops....only we remain
    physically entwinned as we make love in tha rain
    i feel ur need....release daddy an' be freed
    u planted it now i'll carry ur seed
    surround me as i melt into ur loves abyss
    listen to those breezes chant as i receive ur kiss.......


    Nemesis: It's been a century, in three moons, i'm thinking this is meant to be bliss
    as sand breaking sea-because i'm sure a sun'll bloom our seed
    all eternity's our vacancy
    you're that one smile timeless...time is my sundial
    and..seconds are spacious when my hand and your face touch
    so gracious your embrace.. just.. encase your daydream in my gaze
    and i sense the world aging
    suspense in grazing-when you tremble i find it amazing, how our thoughts assemble
    and further ranging on from the strange seems arranged as stencil paintings
    but we're bathing in pastel showers, past the hour of daisies
    opaque flowers in light fading-invites dating-to bright colors.. under night covers
    no need for umbrellas, i bleed into rubbers
    the speed of me smuthers as i repeatingly love thrust
    careful the shade don't run-and i don't rush before i know you've brung
    sunshine on my sprung mind
    confined in your undying extasy
    while i long next to be...sexed by thee
    insulin in the hex I.V.
    you got me sinking in a copy jot by me-of your soul sketch
    soulstress deep as wonder in hell
    under your spell-i wish to soak in a whole stretch of photos in
    as internal you dwell


    Poetic:: If i could roll u an' smoke u, i'd toke u an' provoke u
    to take advantage of my disadvantages....heal me......
    make ur love my bandages
    wrap me in tha words that u manipulate into sexual innuendos that cause me to masturbate
    my words an' climax into a seductive flow
    in a language only u would know
    wit oooooohhhh's and aaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh's an' daddy yesses
    ur words heatin' my skin wit gentle caresses
    damn, u got me stuck.................
    u affect me in a crazy style
    i can't see it but i feel ur smile
    i feel it when tha sun shines my eyes blind
    to anyone else but u...u see how u do
    u....got.....me.........OPEN


    Nemesis: shift these walls in when zoning-into-your eyelids..
    i used to sit silent hearing the hiss of the brisk spheres jeering a lisp
    violin peering split dears that sit here..
    fable breaking through wits which influenced my handle of denial
    that a table, candle fire ..and we.. on the nile..can inspire any to smile..


    glorious days of sun rays


    and so we bask in sunshine thoughts, forget-me-nots
    memories of the lot where your love was first sought
    the power of "our" - the lust for "us" - the memories of "we"
    lets not be blind in the mind to what our souls see
    somewhere emotions collide, and where light is shone we reside
    beyond high tides, where the sun and the moon divide
    and with pride defied, I yearn to reach this horizon, love disguised in
    the guise of your eyes and -, its relevant - you keep me out of my element
    in tune with body and mind where I was soul resident
    becoming evident that your mind is with mine, relationship divine
    defined when the stars were aligned, eternities time assigned
    we unite in loves light, and shine bright in nights,
    in-spite of lover's plights
    hearts swell, and souls delve deeper in loves well
    so steep in your occurrence I've fell





    damn.......... right?
    me and my homeboy nemesis wrote this together............
     
  2. redyelruc

    redyelruc The Yard Man

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    First impressions, I like it. Like all longish pieces that I like here, I will print it out and mull over it slowly. I will get back to you. Keep writing,

    Peace,
    Aidan
     
  3. just_poetic

    just_poetic Member

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    yes, please let me know what u think..........
     
  4. Musikero

    Musikero Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    So THAT's how you did it! I was wondering how you were able to write two distinct personalities into your poem. I liked it. I found it very *ahem* stimulating.:)
     
  5. blackheartbitch

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    i liked it. both personalities make it complete...ur sexual style and his sensual style compliment each other to the point of perfection. when reading it i just wanted it to keep going on
     

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