For The Stars

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by ReadyForAction, Aug 10, 2007.

  1. ReadyForAction

    ReadyForAction Member

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    See the oriental lady
    Sitting on the buss mall
    She has brown hair
    Cold at dusk
    The leaves move softly
    Rustle on the ground
    Face the mirror now
    Face your fear
    She wears a scarf
    Made of cashmere
    As the dawn is rising
    Turn your ear
    Sound made by a train stop
    Newspapers rustle
    Fluid reading made white
    Application for job employment
    A place youÕve never seen
    Building silhouette over sunset green
    Bridges to the trees of old
    Walk through fieldÕs grass of high
    Plunder gold in cities wake
    Old lady tell me stories
    Stories of places gone
    Over the hill of time come and gone
    Where the white doves mate and stow
    A place where yellow is new green
    And birth happens on the walk
    On the move to love and math
    Where trouble boils and comes up fast
    A place of dawning time is fast
    A red colored hue of simple saturation
    Fill your brain with false information
     
  2. Malapascua

    Malapascua Member

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    I think it needs an ending.
    I felt as thought it left me hanging.
     
  3. children of korn

    children of korn Member

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    yea it does need an ending. but other than that its pretty good.
     
  4. ReadyForAction

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    Maybe it is suppose to leave you hanging....
     

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