this sublime crystallized lake shimmers its reflection penetrating deep within my soul A barrage of colours scours the sky creating a painting that seems universally unbound enhanced by the trees that glide through the wind unchanging froze in time that stands statuesque the smell of brisk rain off in the distance fills my nose with an overwhelming sense of meaning peace and tranquility blanket the land such a majestic place this is
I pretty much loved this poem, but the last part where you said "I love it" doesn't fit with the magesty of the preceding words....I think I would like it better if it ended just with "such a majestic place this is" giving the entire poem a feeling of awe and grandure...
Nice poem. Very visual. Leaves me dreaming of Alaska. I agree with dezmondz, get rid of 'I love it'. It leaves the mind with more chance to expand. Good write, Aidan.
