The Seeds of Racism

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by redyelruc, Aug 13, 2007.

  1. redyelruc

    redyelruc The Yard Man

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    The Seeds of Racism

    Mommy, mommy,
    Come meet my friend.
    Which one son,
    That boy near the bend?

    No, Mommy, No.
    He's got curly hair.
    I see him now son,
    That boy over there.

    No, mommy, No,
    He's taller than that!
    That must be him, son,
    That boy with the hat.

    No, Mommy, No,
    His shirt is blue.
    Oh!
    The Black kid!
    _______________________________

    It's quite a silly rhyme but I think it does the job. What do you think?
    All comments and criticisms welcome.

    Peace,
    Aidan
     
  2. mr_alleycat

    mr_alleycat Member

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    Works for me, but the last stanza doesn't quite fit the body of the piece.
    Though, since it's by design, it works.
     
  3. Malapascua

    Malapascua Member

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    Holy shit.
    That about sums up the thought process in place while I was growing up in Boston, in the 60's.

    I'm happy to say that it isn't this way in subburban Connecticut, with my kids in school.

    Aidan, another fine job, as far as I'm concerned.
    I just love the "punch" delivery at the end.
     
  4. saffronfrancisburnet

    saffronfrancisburnet Member

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    hi there

    very true picture of life here

    very good poem in schools also
    about 8 years ago my son was retold this with other differences ie red hair....he was 5 years old at the time...
    when an incident happened with a group of children in school. he also was asked various questions about his
    attitude and i was furious..still living in a colour
    worry world you see.....
    if this makes sence...

    how does a child see others. is the question
    they learn from the past and the parents ie education.....

    so keep spreading the word...
    lovenpeace from saff
     
  5. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    I just don't see how seeing different colors is a terrible thing

    sometimes I get in the mood to jerk off to black girls, other times indian/latina girls, other times asians

    not every mention of race is negative.
     
  6. blackheartbitch

    blackheartbitch Member

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    this sounds like my parents...but ive rebelled against them and their stupidity on that particular issue.
     
  7. redyelruc

    redyelruc The Yard Man

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    lol
     
  8. just_poetic

    just_poetic Member

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    wow...this just about sums it up huh?

    nice, simple piece.......with a strong message............RACISM SUCKS!!!!!!
     
  9. sublime94

    sublime94 Banned

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    Beautiful.
     
  10. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    and I might add

    although I don't agree 100% with the message of the poem, I see where you are coming from, and I do like it quite a bit

    I went through my teen 'trying to be artistic' phase, but now I see that sometimes the best poetry is the most simple poetry
     
  11. The Instinct

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    this is cool, I like it.
     
  12. redyelruc

    redyelruc The Yard Man

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    Thanks everybody for your comments
     

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