More Of My Poetry...Without The Symbols...

Let's Get Twisted
I'm playing on word dancing on these cliche phrases
and spilling my heart out through this pen

Communicating through dirty looks and shaky smiles
and realizing for the first time
that I'm nothing more than a failed attempt to fade out
before everything worthwhile fades away.

So cross the i's baby
and dot thses t's...
Mix it up like you always manage to do
you seem to forget, i like it twisted.
But I woln't hold that against you
if you promise to press everything into me.
A lttle against the wall forgiveness does the body good.
And this frail frame is aching for a pleasent time.
I'm just begging for one precious moment to forget...

can't you give me that?

Alot Like Sin City
Shhh! Baby don't shatter this silence.
I know what you're thinking.
Didn't I tell you that I can read minds?
And oh how dirty yours is!

I'm such a little stunner
sitting in the monotone
in your favorite red dress.
I guess I look alot like sin city.

How the hell could you resist
when I've got you wrapped around my finger
and I'm wrapped around your hips.

Oh baby
you make this love shit
oh so easy to fake.
And there in lies the fairytale.

Fuck Fairytales
Snow White...what a bitch.
She got her prince
and her perfect ending.

Fuck Cinderella.
What happened to my evil queen Cruella?
Wait...didn't they tell ya?
That there's no such thing as the perfect fella.

And Rapunsel was a blonde.
Her prince left her when he found out she was dumb
and then her fairytale was gone.

Screw fairytales and happy endings.
Who are they kidding?
All they do is screw with your head.
Make you believe in love at first sight.
But really baby, it's just lust.
I've had too many fairytales end and I give up.
I've had enough.

 

Wow, I like this line........

And WOW WOW WOW
This is funny, true, hard hitting, and to the point
Good stuff.........

 

I'm with Malapascua. I like the fairytales poem the most. Very witty.

Peace,
Aidan

 

really? thanks you two...i'm glad you liked them...i have more about fairytales, i could post those too if you would like to read them...

 

Post away, naked, I'll read them.

 

okay...i'll post more tomarrow...

 

About your avatar........
Why were you crying?

 

i dont remember...

 

I liked the imagery, and felt the emotion as well.

Because I to became disillusioned, I knew something was afoot when I discovered Santa to be just a marketing tool. No workshop, no elves, No mrs Santa to keep him warm at night.

I was about 30 at the time:whistling

 

Ha ha ha

 

you have a very strong sense of rhythm and flow

but I don't like much of the content:
"So cross the i's baby
and dot thses t's..."
over used
and so is the fucked up fairy tales idea

and Alot Like Sin City was very Panic! if you ask me

you obviously have talent
but get away from all the stereotypical bullshit and be more original

 

Thanks. I'll try and keep that in mind next time I write...but you have to read it next time to tell me if I did better! Deal?

 

i like the Fairtales one the best as well.

 

I like the fairy tale one the best. Good job on that one! True love isn't what it seems though. Sometimes some do care as much as the fairy tale and then they're just walked all over by the dumb blonde or by an evil one like cruella. Love just isn't fair. All is just my opinion though.

 

Thanks. Alot of people seem to like the fairytale one best.

Your siggy confuses me...

 

deal

don't really aim to be like anything, or don't aim to make your poem a certain way, just let it happen

write lots, not just when you are in certain moods