I'll Never Know It's about time I told you how I feel. It's weighing heavily on my mind, Stuttered script crawling by on faded movie reels. I wish more than anything I could confess this to you. But right now there's all fuck that I can do. [chorus] You were the best thing to ever enter my life. It sounds contrived but it's true. And the sad truth is that you may never know all this. You were gone before I even knew what to do. I've been thinking of you alot this past month. Remembering all we've been through. I've kept these memories of you, Neatly folded away somewhere no one else could find. But now I'm shit out of luck and grappling with this confused mind. [repeat chorus] You changed everything for me. Reversed my half empty outlook and gnawing apathy. But I've really never impacted you in any way more, Than just a good friend who's drifted away, And I fear that you'll just forget me one of these days. [chorus...again] I never thought I'd find something beautiful as you. But I did...(but I did.) But you were gone before I could tell you a thing. Now I'm just another heartsick kid. I wish I knew what how it felt to kiss you, I wish I knew the comfort of your arms. I wish I knew the way to convince you of this... But I'll never know. I'll never know. I'm sure she's all you could ever want. Tell me what you think...I'm in a band and I just wrote this...I wanna know what you all think before I show it to the guys. Being the lead singer I'm not the one who write the songs...our guitarist does. I just sing 'em. And dance a little around stage. So tell me what you honestly thiought of it! Don't worry about being too harsh!! Thanks for reading my work!
Well, it's always hard to judge a song without hearing it, but.. overall, I like it. My favourite part is the first verse. I think it's really well put together and I could sing it about myself. I presume 'all fuck' should read 'fuck all'. I'm not sure if I like the chorus as much. It's a bit sentimental. But that's just my opinion. It fits the song and if the tune is good would have the masses singing so...I dunno. I do like the end though. It's soppy but I like the way you resigned to the loss in the last line. Anyway, first song. Good work. As for the guys in the band, show it to 'em. If they don't like it, the world's not over.:bigcry: Be proud of your work, go solo, make a million and stick it up their asses. :rockon: Peace, Aidan.
Obviously you've got to think about the beat and the melody, and what relation the words have to them. You might even want to try for a rhyme scheme. Then again, I'm not a fan of punk rock, and if punk rock has a melody at all it's news to me.
I'm not a song writer but do write some poetry... I do know that fresh is something you should always aim for and there are some things in here that are cliches It's about time weighing heavily on my mind the best thing to ever enter my life sad truth shit out of luck one of these days comfort of your arms The phrases I loved best are... Stuttered script crawling by on faded movie reels confess this to you grappling with this confused mind Reversed my half empty outlook Now I'm just another heartsick kid good luck...
