I Am I am not white. I am swirls of green,blue,purple,orange, and colors no one knows. I am not American. I am part of a much larger culture...the human race. I am not asking you to follow my lead or do what I do. I am asking you to walk with me and be my friend. I am not asking you to love me. I am asking you to respect me even though we are different. I am not rich with money, cars, or jewerly. I am rich with love, hope, and faith. I am not part of the crowd yet, I am not alone. I am just me. I am not looking at you because you are different. I am looking at you because I am curious and I want to learn. I am not going to be mad at the people trying to bring us down. I am going to thank them for making me stronger and wiser. I am not going to fight you for our differences. I am going to embrace you for them. I am not going to say I'm sorry because someone thinks your different. I am going to stand by you and let us be different together. I am not white. I am swirls of green, blue, purple, orange, yellow, and colors no one knows. So what did you think? This is my first poem ever...I've never even wrote anything for poetry assignments. I paid the smart people to do it. But yeah...tell me what you think. I didn't like it but maybe someone else will... BE HONEST!! Don't worry about being harsh...I can take it....
are you sure this is your first? its really good, and it really expresses your feelings! if this is your first, youre going to be amazing when you really get going! keep writing, please!
OK, you want harsh. That may be the best poem you ever write. You may have peaked already. But even if it is, it was really worth it. It's perfect. I am swirls of red, violet and blue so I will say thank you. It's nice to see some positivity for a change. The bit I quoted, I am going to read aloud every morning, in an effort to better myself. Peace, Aidan
yeah it's my first... i wrote it yesterday at work. Thanks everyone! and I thought it was bad but I guess not...
WOW-just WOW! This is amazing. You didn't tell me you could write!! I'm shocked. When we were chatting it just didn't seem like you could write something like this. No offense but you just seemed like one of thoses girls that just likes to make out with guys and is always horny. Not someone who could write a poem. I loved it.
I like this a lot. Too bad we can't all do this poem in real life...we can actually but many chose not to. If this is your first, then I say that's a hell of a first step. Please don't stop there!
Thanks YouRemindMeOfYou...and no offense taken. Even if you were mean to me I would still love ya! And thanks to you too The Instict! And it's really really hard for me to write poetry. I can only write if if I'm reall really super bored. But I'll try to write more. I can't garentee it'll be good but I'll still try.
That was great. Really to the point and not overloaded with langauge. I loved the sentiment, thats a classic right there! Thanks for posting it!
A lovely effort...brings out the hippy at the heart of us all I like to think that I am so many colours I can't even name them, or indeed, that I am made up of colours as yet unidentifiable. But think about this: the 'colour' white is said to be made up of every single colour in the spectrum - did you ever have those mulitcoloured wheels at school, which you put onto elastic and spun until they whizzed white? So even from a scientific aspect, 'white' people are made up of many colours anyway!
