Jail Break

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by ReadyForAction, Aug 19, 2007.

  1. ReadyForAction

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    The sun had stooped quite low
    As men came up the rivers flow

    The sound of thunder up the hill
    Barking hounds have found the trail

    Fast rain has come to wet the smell
    Drawing creatures from restless slumber

    The wisps of dust have turned to mud
    Sweetly sounding off from buds

    Scent of death looms ahead
    Killers wait in contentious dread

    Bark of hound in perfect step
    Hiding places must be steep

    Doom has come to place your fate
    Men in blue that bring the hate

    Take it back to lock it up
    Find the pieces of what you mean

    Time endless in the pyre
    Watch out, lightning fire

    Stare at illumination, scream
    Where red tide streams, air is green

    Gusting wind blows the hat
    Off the head of sin

    The sun breaks out form the clouds
    The rhythm of land has returned again
     
  2. shobs

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    insane man, totaly mind trip for me. it was like being inside of s story
     
  3. Malapascua

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    As I opened this thread, the song "Jail Break" came on the radio.
    How weird is that?
     
  4. ReadyForAction

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    Most be high levels of energy here.
     
  5. shobs

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    liquid metallic
     
  6. Stubb0rnSt0n3r

    Stubb0rnSt0n3r Banned

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    Fuckin' A dude, makes me think about how I came up with the a song title "out on bail", and sure enough, muthafuckin steevo comes out with a retarded video by the same name. Fuck that scatty flakey shit man.
    Pretty good write.
     
  7. Malapascua

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    I read it again and was wondering if the line
    "Hiding places must be steep"
    might read better if it were
    "Hiding places must be kept"

    Just a thought.
     

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