Bathed in Blue

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Bhaskar, Aug 24, 2007.

  1. Bhaskar

    Bhaskar Members

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    Walking in a playful drizzle of sapphire sunlight,
    I laugh a lavender laugh
    as I watch the Mazarine butterfly
    flit from cyan sunflowers to cerulean roses.
    I stop a moment to breathe deep
    the azure scent of the crisp cobalt grass
    wafting on the sweet emerald breeze.
    Looking into the vast golden sky,
    I chuckle at how everything turns inside out
    when your mind is bathed in blue.
     
  2. emelia

    emelia the resident gangsta

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    I really like this poem, it's very vivid and calming.
     
  3. Firebelle

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    *GASP* Can this be my very same Bhaskar, the one I used to dreamily converse with all those whiles ago? It's Firebelle - if you are that same Bhaskar, do you remember me? As regards the poem; I like the way you have kept up the theme of colour, and threaded it through the poem from beginning to end. I especially love the idea of a 'lavender laugh'. Beautiful.
     
  4. Bhaskar

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    Are you really 21 already? I remember you being a feisty 16-year-old that took my breath away!
     
  5. Jack Maundrell

    Jack Maundrell C.A.P

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    nice imagery used, very cool
     
  6. Firebelle

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    Yes, I am indeed 21...and you really do say the sweetest things, I never did take your breath away! I was naive then and I'm naive now - some things don't change - just like your lovely, melodious poetry :) It's so brilliant to hear from you! XxX
     
  7. Bhaskar

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    I would say innocent. Naievete is weakness, innocence is strength. And your poetry is strong and unique and beautiful. You, dear one, are innocent.
     
  8. Malapascua

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    C O L O R F U L

     
  9. Firebelle

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    Aww, now I'm blushing...innocence is a tricky thing I think! I've never thought of innocence as being either a weakness or a strength, though both innocence and weakness have a sense of vulnerability about them, but in very different ways. Whether I am really innocent or not, I've perfected the look of innocence, that's true...ha ha! X
     
  10. saffronfrancisburnet

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    hi
    i agree this is a lovely piece
    i love the colours of life...
    lovnpeace from saff
    keep writing this is a beautiful style.
     
  11. redyelruc

    redyelruc The Yard Man

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    Nice poem. You managed to keep the colour idea going without being cliched or boring. I really think a 'lavender laugh' sounds just great.

    Peace,
    A.
     
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