Liquid Sleepless Dreams is about pure perfection in my opinion. I wouldnt change a thing about how you write! It's wonderful And the last one I love as well, do you have a title for it? Or it doesnt need one?
oh my god. thankyou so much. i haven't got a title, only because i couldn't think of one, can you think of anything that would be good for it? thank you for your comment, its appreciated so much! X
hmmm.........a title? hmmmmm........ I cant think of one either! It makes me think so many things, like Om, Holy Spirit or some kind of all permeating love essence.... I dont know either :tongue:
haha. thanks anyway relayer. maybe i will come up with one some day. any other comments would be most welcome. thank you.X
Hey little ski. Welcome to the forums. I like the third untitled poem best. It gives me a lot of images. I picture you sitting on your balcony looking at the beautiful Devon coast. It also works as an inward poem, the sounds and fellings of meditation when you see everyone and nobody sees you. Well done. Keep posting. Peace, A.
Yeah, my favorite is the untitled one too. Maybe because it's similar to how I feel here. A kind of invisibility that I enjoy that goes along with simultaneous discovery of the outside and the inside. And Liquid Sleeples Dream played out like an an animation in my mind Colorful and trippy.
