I built my fortress with the strongest tools I own Just in case you would stumble back somewhere down the road I made sure there was no door, the walls were high as well I remain in my place today and guess what? you have no chance in hell I must admit, I left a window, enough for me to see you Throwing rocks at my walls and burning our bridge, which will not ever self-renew I wont leave my place behind the wall because unbeknownst to you on the other side I am laughing and smiling with everyone else And you are outside alone ___________________________ And if you come closer My athena bows of golden fury will shake down your world After all the history to think youd approach a tiger like me.. well they say dont stick your fingers in the cage My primal suggestion is to step back and cover over your tracks it wont be the same again
You are a genius. To compare not wanting someone to date you anymore to building an impregnable fortress has never crossed my mind ever. Good job!
You guys I *so* did not expect this great reaction....thank you!!! It means so much to me. Im just kind of starting out with my creative writing!
feels like it could be song lyrics, which is not meant to be a bad thing. you should come up with a melody for it
I really liked the end of it, it's very strong and I love that pic in your signature. That's the most beautiful sky.
Well I was so angry when I wrote that poem, I felt like I was being disrupted so much by something which is so not good for me and I tried to put in my past. I wrote the first part, and realized, it needed more. I dont know if they really flow together, but I like that there are two parts
To me the last part was better than the first to be honest. It's just so strong and in your face. I love it!
Cate, I actually have something very similar that I wrote, mine was about being on an island where the guy couldnt get in, but it's in Spanish, MAYBE I'll try to translate and share, I'm not a big fan of the translation thing, but yeah I really liked him and he was a bastard and I kept on coming back to him, until I finally cut loose. Then he started dating my friend and she kinda did to him all the things he did to me. I guess that was Karma at work for him :tongue: I just realized that, so I guess that's part of the reasons why I really liked it, I can relate really well.
