strike me paradise

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by airyckq, Nov 7, 2007.

  1. airyckq

    airyckq Member

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    Strike me paradise!
    Make me move! - I dance
    beneath the churning stars,

    I flail and sing and cry out joyously,
    I temper my movements with the sweet grace
    of ill-conceived confidence.

    Strike me rich, paradise, with your bountiful nature -
    send me reeling across the night in blind
    glancing freedom. Spill me into the universe.

    I swing and let the constellations
    collect themselves upon the vast black canvas.
    I spin, and the gravity of dancing
    weaves another circuitous galaxy.
    I have the weight of ancientness;
    I bear the burden of now on tantric shoulders.

    Paradise, make me over in your image,
    like the river carves the cliffs,
    like the mountains reach at skies,
    like the dreams that come in sleep,
    like the clouds that calm the sun.

    (In paradise, the moment passes.
    It comments on itself, flutters, and,
    like a daydream, wanders languid
    into the spectacle of being.)
     
  2. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    these parts are wonderful! good job...post more...
     
  3. bbbeccaaa

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    beautiful imagery, loved reading this.
     
  4. airyckq

    airyckq Member

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    Thanks! [​IMG]
     
  5. airyckq

    airyckq Member

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    I tweaked it a little bit, for whatever that is worth:

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