Our Chance

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by blackheartbitch, Nov 12, 2007.

  1. blackheartbitch

    blackheartbitch Member

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    all comments and critisism welcomed.


    OUR CHANCE
    Our chance for greatness is upon us,
    staring us in the face telling of the future,
    showing that all is meant to be as it is right now,
    showing that through the pain and trials of our lives
    in the end we found our happiness in each other.
    through the touch of our hands and the combining of our lips
    we found the truth that was meant to be,
    even though we already knew we would end up this way,
    from the very beginning we knew somehow that we’d be together.

    My darling did you feel it the first times our eyes met?
    Did you invision us to be?
    Well I did and now that we are here
    making my dreams into reality
    all that is left to do is to say
    that love is real and we cant escape it,
    our emotions are poured out like blood from a cut
    but this is different love is not like pain it is not like hurting
    it is a feeling of such great maltitude that we feel so much,
    so much beauty that it feels like pain.

     
  2. art_hippie

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    it is a feeling of such great maltitude that we feel so much,
    so much beauty that it feels like pain


    i liek this phrase:}:}:}

    keep on writing:}:}:}

    lots of sunny smiles
    peace
    Nadia
     
  3. blackheartbitch

    blackheartbitch Member

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    ^ thanks. may peace and love find you.
     
  4. senzgirl

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    I really liked the ay you expressed your love here..it's a difficult feeling to put to words and you chose the perfect words to envision your feelings.
     
  5. blackheartbitch

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    thank you. yes expressing love can be quite difficult...ive personally never written much about love but this one came quite easily
     
  6. MrCoolGuy69

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    very good BlackHeartBitch. whatever's inspiring you to write this, keep it
     
  7. blackheartbitch

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    mrcoolguy i plan to.
     

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