After rain

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by art_hippie, Nov 23, 2007.

  1. art_hippie

    art_hippie Member

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    Lonely road.
    After rain.
    Small drops of happiness.
    There is a hill.
    In the valley of Love.

    Can you imagine it?

    Take a trip.
    To the heart of the Earth.
    Listen to the beat.
    Remember the melody.
    Bring it to your land.

    By the
    Lonely road
    After rain
     
  2. poopzilla33

    poopzilla33 Member

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    i like it a lot, but there really shouldn't be a period at the end of everyline, it makes it sound choppy
     
  3. art_hippie

    art_hippie Member

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    hey thx for your comment:}:}:}
     
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