So here's my webcomic, which is currently unnamed. *Deleted name* is just a substitute until I think up a better one. Anyway - let me know what you think. The art isn't great at first, but it gets better. I've only had about 3 days experience on Gimp (similar to Photoshop, which I've never used before either), so bear that in mind! Let me know what you think. *EDIT - 30/05/08* Just took out all the stuff to do with the original name...I realised that people can google my site and find my profile and I'd prefer people I know not knowing my HipForums username.
Thanks. Someone suggested that I rather release my comics in bigger bundles because it currently doesn't make sense. Admittedly, Pages 8-12 are basically 1 big comic/scene and I shoud've waited to post them all together. Anyway, I hope it does in fact make some kind of sense. I will post the next 3 comics together within the next couple of days. After that, there will be more dialogue and character development in the process.
You're a very talented artist. And while the later drawings do look best, I would hardly say the first ones looked bad! I think they still looked good. Anything I draw could be mistaken for a kid's drawing. Lol.
Thanks for that Just a note - I'm actually more interested in knowing what people thing of the story/characters so far (even if neither are too developed thus far). What I've realised is that one can have awesome art for a comic, but without a catchy storyline, the comic sucks. Still let me know what you think of the art though I am aware of some of the problems with my art - for example the overly curvy faces, the skew pool table, the dude's huge forehead :S It'll get better with time hopefully, but please point out any areas of my art that I could improve on
As far as art... it's a cartoon and to a degree a caricature of humanity. It's your choice as to how far you want to take that and not really something that anyone who appreciates this type of art will criticize even if it's not their thing. As for characters and subject matter... I get the sense that this is a step in the caricature direction as well. Perhaps select or develop an interesting character who does surprising things to other characters under the guise of courtesy, saying the nicest things to other characters' faces then muttering under his breath what's really on his mind when their backs are turned... or quietly finishing sentences to completely skew their meanings... like, "Yeah, I fed the cat.... to the dog" I like the details that aren't central to the story line. It provides something "new" for someone who has already read the comic but didn't notice the "this is not a handbag" label. Think about packing subplots and little punch lines into the frames that most people are going to miss. Things like a bum holding a sign that reads, "will solve pi to 10,000 significant digits for food" and such things. A "Broom handle for rent" sign in an upstairs window might make a person or two stop and think, "wait, who the hell rents broom handles?".
Thanks for that advice stinkfoot I actually really appreciated and enjoyed those ideas you suggested I'll definitely keep those things in mind when I next write a comic. Oh and I'll update tomorrow probably...was too busy today to finish the final page of the little 3 page thing.
The drawing's are well done, the lettering is nice and legible, however, I think you need much work on the characters and story telling aspects. You have to not only have a clear idea of all the characters in your mind, you have to find a way to display those clear characters in a way people will relate to them. Try slowing down a bit. Work on making the characters, particularly the main character more clear. Don't work so much on making the comic, but work on making a quality comic. Maybe, for now, try doing less of a serial comic, and worry about developing it into one.
Yeah, I was thinking the same. I'm actually planning to do far more character development in the coming strips, with more dialogue to aid the process. Thanks for the advice It's nice to get some constructive criticism for a change.
Oh and I just wanted to add/ask - what I'm currently doing with the comic is introducing characters. I don't want to go too in depth while people have hardly seen the characters. Like with the first day in the comic - that was just a little intro scene for my two male characters. I wanted to just let people know that these two guys are friends, and give a tiny amount of insight into their personalities (eg. the fact that the fat dude is gay). The girl playing pool was her introduction (which will continue later today, and hopefully give more insight to her personality), after which I will develop my characters and plot more. Does that sound like a good idea? Have I done this effectively?
