she was right.

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by HawkinsOrchestra, Apr 7, 2008.

  1. HawkinsOrchestra

    HawkinsOrchestra Member

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    She didn’t believe me, that I can’t write about love.
    She said she cherishes my words, how they flow so smoothly.
    She said she reads my thoughts all day just so she can get a taste.
    I tried to tell her, but she didn’t believe me.
    I can’t stand disbelief.
    I threw down emotions and musical rhythm, and I made an incision.
    I cut open my chest and removed my best for her, but it wasn’t enough.
    She said I was right.
    She said I can’t write about love.

     
  2. Blkrubbersoul

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    really great right here. the ending ties up the rest of the piece so well.
    i enjoyed reading this
     
  3. skyfire

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    you know, i've read this like three times now, and i just "got" it. i'm a little dense. anyway, i like this too now that i get it. it's really sad (but subtle). it actually says a lot about trust and understanding, and the struggles we go through to connect with other people. so...another good one.
     

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