Silent Speculation & Sleep Lines

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by skyfire, Sep 22, 2004.

  1. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    Silent Speculation

    You called me crazy
    but that's the way i sound
    at three in the morning
    when i've had too much to drink
    and i'm half-way between my world
    and the real world
    and i feel misunderstood

    I'm a puzzle
    and if you could find all my pieces
    and put me back together
    i could love you
    but i'm afraid one of the corners
    got kicked under the bed
    and some of the blue pieces
    that would have made up the sky
    were glued to a child's picture frame

    And the tree outside my window
    looks like a Monet
    all the lines softened by the rain
    and the colors muddled by the clouds
    and you're wondering what i'm staring at
    but i cant explain art

    And in silent speculation
    i relfect on your invasion
    and i breathe a little softer
    as my mind dances
    from dream to dream

    _________


    Sleep Lines

    And the world keeps turning
    as i stare at the wall
    but the world is oblivious to me
    and you know it's true
    cuz when i sleep the birds will chirp
    and when i wake
    the stars say hello
    but i'm just a little backwards

    And i dont mean to laugh
    when you're mad
    but the look on your face
    as you crawled into bed
    made me nervous
    so i had to laugh
    but i'm just a little insensitive

    And the voices in my head
    are saying, "go back to sleep"
    but i dont think i can
    cuz it's still dark
    and you're still here
    and i cant close my eyes when you're here
    i'm afraid you'll leave when i cant see
    but i'm just a little paranoid

    And i can feel the world turning
    as i stare at the wall
    it wants me to sleep
    and i know it's true
    cuz the birds fly south for the winter
    and when i wake
    i will tell you hello
    but now i'm just a little exhausted...
     
  2. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    hey...haven't written or posted nething in a while...so i hope you enjoy these...and sorry if you dont!
     
  3. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    I enjoyed both of those. Great job.
     
  4. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    Such great flow that you have, and I really love the abnormal psychology overtones. Thanks for sharing these and I look forward to more from you.
     
  5. littleskinny

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    I liked "Silent Speculation" most out of the two...I like your "voice", and the realism, and honesty...keep writing...
     
  6. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    Thank you~! Very nice. Kepp finding myself rereading instead of posting, lol, thanks again hun~!
     
  7. saffronfrancisburnet

    saffronfrancisburnet Member

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    hi there
    two lovely pieces to poetry here

    i love the way nature encloses you
    and how you long to be you .......

    love n peace from saff

    ps all is never lost of forgot
    just hidden while we find ourselves
    to grow from one idea is the only way ;
    our aim our desire to belong
    with choices along our paths.......
    but beware the self is cruel yet true enough
    for you............


    for you .........
     
  8. Icurus

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    Hi Skyfire, Devon Knight here! ")
    I'm using Icurus now, couldn't get back on
    with my name, so!??, but it's me!!, glad to see
    you here, so long a time to not speak to one another,
    very happy to see some veterans around, I liked both
    these, and don't get mad/discouraged, but I think you
    could, and have done better, lots of emotion in these,
    I, myself have tried eliminating alot of the (in between words)
    that read more like a letter, then a more mindful, mistical approach
    to the words from the heart, I liked the the part in which you
    describe the tree and how the water thru window gives it
    it's, icing per say, hope you stick around a long time ")
    take care,
    Devon Knight / "Icurus" as in "The flight of Icarus" great story/book,
    you'll notice I had to spell it wrong, oh well!
    peace!!!!!!
     
  9. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Goooooorgeous.
     
  10. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    Thank you all for your replies...i hadnt written or posted in a while so i didnt know how well i was going to be recieved, but you all restored my confidence....so thank you...


    DEVON!!! so great to hear from you again...its been too long! hope to see you around soon....
     
  11. fizzy_elf

    fizzy_elf Member

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    ooooohhh.......my favourite bits :)
     
  12. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    :) thank you...you all make me happy...
     
  13. Crayon

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    hehe. I can relate to that, actually. Reminds me of certain odd times in my life.

    I really do like your work. Simple with a kick :)

    love and light
     

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