hey, im new to this whole posting thing...but heres a poem i wrote...i was hoping to get a few peoples opinions on it Thanks D r i f t i n g shadows in the dark, come together, then fall a.p.a.r.t. Spiral d D o o w w n n w w a a r r d, d spiral, into the ever present night. I played NO part in this-- maybe that's what's wrong. You chose to bring yourself near, now you rip yourself from me. I played NO part in this, my love. Is that why it's okay? For you, this is ((nothing)). You d r i f t back into a dark sea of souls, from which you arose on golden wings. --A million promised lies, and you say this is better. Perhaps you are right. In the end, I couldn't save you. You robbed yourself of the light, --which you brought. It shadowed my world, It s. h. a. t. t. e. r. e. d. my world, --You took from me... --I thought it was right. What's wrong with you? Can you not accept fate? Perhaps running is easier... Im not responsible for the interesting illustrative typing of it, that was my friend, who decided to post it on her web site
uhm...the first two lines were the best in the poem...i liked those lines...but to tell u the truth, i found the "interresting illustrative" typing distracting....it really hides ur words....
