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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by fulmah, Oct 5, 2004.

  1. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    becoming the octopus

    Hold that pose ten minutes more.
    That sweet, tempestral pirouette
    could activate harmonic rhapsody
    augmenting heavy coital piston.

    She shifted her—
    not so it hurt, I mean
    so that friction
    expanded…

    The contortionist choreography
    created warm nimbus playground
    lounged below feather comforter,
    flaunting technique. A slow rake
    from calve, to that classified spot
    behind her knee, to inner thigh,
    then stopping to play the pink
    with elliptical rhythm,
    and lewd mind.

    Her fingers clawed,
    almost extracted blood,
    not that I mind anything
    causing curled toed reflex;
    and her toes curled,
    her back arched

    as we became an octopus
    of arms and legs akimbo,
    relaxed in spent radiance.


    *note: I thought tempestral was a word that held a kind of "spiritual enlightenment" connotation. Alas, it does not; it’s not even a word, but dammit, it stays!
     
  2. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Get me all hot and bothered why dontcha!

    There was a rollercoaster ride called the Octupus back in my state, I called it the Octupussy!
     
  3. lucyinthesky

    lucyinthesky Tie Dyed Soul

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    this poem makes me want to touch myself. teehee.

    i'll bet you everyone who reads this can relate this perfectly to their mate :)
     
  4. MyAphrodesiac

    MyAphrodesiac Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

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    Nice work! That's such erotica. Mmmm...I like.
     
  5. saffronfrancisburnet

    saffronfrancisburnet Member

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    sexy...

    reminds me of the moment you feel as one
    come as one finish together.......

    i love the octopus ....

    love n peace from saff
     
  6. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    All smiles here. You combine grace and intensity so well. This reader found your poem visually stunning and mind numbing in its passionate friction. Love the lingering and expansive tantric undertones... or should that be overtones. :)
     
  7. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    See how popular this genre is! Write more... *winks*
     
  8. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    This time it wasn't my hot flashes,lol~! and ditto to what KittenX said too.
     
  9. gloom is beautiful

    gloom is beautiful Member

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    more!!! =D

    that was just...fuckin HOT...mmmmmm...i have dirty thoughts now :)
     
  10. purusha

    purusha Member

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    combining intelllllllllectualism and orgasm...i like it
     
  11. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    wow, thanks for all the replies! glad this topic caught fire, and yes; I'll keep it coming ;)
     
  12. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    candles on porceline lip illumine
    a jet stirred lather lagoon
    of steam cloud tentacles
    and moist, ecologic lubricant
    that bathes the beginning spot.

    let these hands
    roll the reiki catalyst
    into deep tissue zone;
    just you relax and roam

    and we’ll connect tongues
    to flesh the tantric lullaby
    escaping in an aching moan.

    the stage is set.

    swelled length enters,
    begins propulsion drive,
    sink into the seat and ride,
    hold your forehead to mine,
    wrap arms around my neck
    drop and rise and slide.

    bite your bottom lip,
    let go, lean back, stretch out
    when you’ve reached your ceiling:
    we’ll cruise that altitude.

    *note: I kinda reworded a line from "heavy metal country" by guided by voices since the song was stuck in my head while I was writing this :)
     
  13. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Steamy...my only concern was 'wet, hot, and ready'...*cringes* that's a little too obvious.
    My fav was the end...
    Love the whole, ceiling and cruising at an altitude idea, really funky shit Fulmahhh...

    Oooh and
    is awesome! Sexy tension here.
     
  14. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    the tom I warned about

    i’m incognito among the bushes,
    under the stars, across the street,
    binoculars enlarging your window,
    oh so glad you dumped that guy
    that’d rush to close your blinds.

    supple porcelain mountains
    with pierced tops; yeah hun!
    rub that tanning lotion in,
    and do it slow… I know
    the cool contrast from
    showers steaming vent
    gets them hard!

    if I were older, with iron nerve,
    I’d ring your bell right now,
    await your answer, towel clad,
    and chance the door’s quick close.
    but you’re lonely, right? unloved?
    well I’d nibble on your ear
    until the towel fell;
    then we’d fuck.
     
  15. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Wowzers....am I even allowed to comment on this?! :p

    Well I'll comment anyway! This almost made me wish I had a peeping tom...a horny peepin' tom! as creepy as that is, but it's all your fault, using all that pretty language to entice!
     

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