I slowly proceed to pretend to care in slow motion, Some harness of truth leaves you offended from that offer, Modern times aren’t so nice And it tends to be displayed in brackets Where crowds can see and jeer and laugh accordingly to the score... We can pretend to touch Or we can continue to pretend to stumble unto One another’s bodies, Layers and layers we fall unto one another Terrified and humbled at what we find, Jealous to find how much kinder you are than I.... At night, sometimes I wish you didn’t exist, It honestly keeps me up, I unfurl my hair, Curl my toes, And wish I could pry my dead grandmothers ring off your frigid finger ...
the first two lines, eh the first line particularly, "i slowly proceed to pretend to care" sounds like "glababababa" if you say "glaba..." aloud "i pretend to care in slow motion" sounds good enough "from" that offer? "by" that offer? harness/leaves is an odd combo i really like the brackets thing you lost me at the second stanza, or you pretended me out of the picture there's a lot of "we are one" in the second stanza and it ends in a "you are more one than i are" sort of way i like the last stanza, it's good for me "it keeps me up as i unfurl my hair, curl my toes and wish i could pry my dead grandmother's ring off your frigid finger" i dunno, maybe not, but that was my shot good stuff, i dig
