ok, I'm completely new to story writing, and I signed up for a class at a community college nearby. Class hasn't started yet, but while antisipating it I remember an idea for a book I once thought up. I wont go into detail yet; and I just want to bounce some ideas off your heads. I hold the book very close to home, and because I have been writing only for 1 day I will not sbject it to critisizm. This however is an exerpt from my notes that I am throwing to the wolves... If ye be wolves... So tell me what you think, critisize ur hearts out because soon I will need to fill in large gaps in my theme and story... The book overall is about personal assention and how it leads to the growth of all humanity. On paper it tells the story of a family and community escaping out of their environment (old notions about reality), into space (personal and universal freedom) ultimatly achieved through individual accountability I think you should get my drift... I'm still forming this in my head... So without (much) further 'adoo' (wtf is adoo?), here are some raw notes I have made. aftr restrictions were lifted psycadelics were studied not feared. pandora's box was opened. not deamons but ways of thinking, feeling, and acting were released. As the governments of the earth felt the first wave they buckled and relented to the old thoughts, but as individuals began to dose themselves they saw, each of them, that the world could change, had to change. Each man looked into the future and collectively they heard. Grow and live. Stop war on your brother. that isn't part of the book, just me writing down the futures history as I imagine it will be... This is some addmitedly bland dialoue, but tell me what u think, not of the writing, but is there humanity in it. Does it seem real or fake? This (diolouge) is imo the weakest part and i know its a short clip, but comment please... the living city built upon the dead... bones cry for release/rest, from the weight of the city above... the city in the sky cries to the heavens as lovers mourn separation, envelop us! "Take me with you!" she cried, "i can't" he spat, "where i'm going you cannot go." She pleaded now, "do not leave us!" Hapnom only turned down his eyes. "he will be back!" Atima insisted, "for all of us!" "we are dead and dying. what will he find but death when he returns?" Hapnum cleared his throat, " i will return, they have the power of life. I will return soon." "we will return soon!" kyly projected. Lets get some blood pumping into the writer's forum! THIS exchanging ideas is OUR best hope to fight ignorance! btw in my book everyone is 'dosing' (getting high) with thousands of unique drugs, we are not mechanical, we are chemical! This could be a reality already if all the ppl 'fighting' drugs, tried some themselves! How long will we let ourselves be governed by ppl that are ignorant of the benifits of 'mind altering?' Four words for them. Think outside the box. help us make drugs safer! we are not the enemy, the enemy is hate that is inside ALL of us.
It is a good start, you got some solid ideas. I would suggest making an organized outline of your story that should help fill out some stuff. Work on a plot, go in more depth with the meaning and setting. Build some characters up. It sounds really cool. I would also suggest a book called the 3 A.M. Epiphany which is uncommon writing practices for fiction writers
keeep it up, man. i know you are struggling with profound ideas atm. be patient and love your work, cause it seems like we do, too good luck, and hit me with an email if you need anything.
In essence, this should be the key part of your story. Great job, all of this prior to the class beginning shows a lot of dedication Write write write, don't stop because as it seems, you are on a great track. I write a lot too, sometimes I will draw out scenes from thoughts I have to help me write about them easier, oddly enough it works wonderfully, even if it's a couple of 'doodles' or 'sketches', they can go a long way with creating within your imagination. Don't forget, Intro, Climax, Ending. Make it BIG.. :cheers2:
