so i've had this song called land locked blues by bright eyes stuck in my head. every time i start to write this poem the tune and rhythm come into my head. so every time i try and read it to see if i like it, thats all i can hear. what do you think? good or bad? anything i should adjust? as our future swings over the moon we prosper content in our rooms its here, high away we've tucked many a day that we've known, that we know that will be. and i lie awake in your bed you rest on my breast your sweet head. your arms wrap around and we snuggle on down hum i love you, you love me to sleep. the stars round the moon look our way they echo the dreams of our days. they play on your face as they gleam, we embrace in these tangled up, warm huddled seas. and as they whisper the things that they know lo, of you, and of us to below. your hand slow adjusts to cup and to touch and we slumber on through to the day.
its a nice way of writting, i love it. im not sure what it is, but certain parts of this trigger something inside me that inspires me and brings ideas of a poem to my head. i keep reading it over and over and each time i get a lil spark, like when u have an idea but not quite sure what it is...maybe its just me, but im going to keep reading it over and over as its giving me a poem by teh looks of it. thankyou for creating such beauty, id love to see what else you have
thank you! i still can't help but to hear that song every time i read it, but i think i like it. i'm not entirely sure yet, but thanks! it still seems like something might be off... is there anything i should change or work on?