my first poem posted...

This is the first poem iv ever posted here...so yea...here it goes:

this poem i wrote in italian class one day cus my friend was mad at me and never tells me WHY shes mad...anyway...

LET IT SHOW​

Your strangled words give no indication, ​

To your anger'd motivation.​

Sift threw your mind and gain a thought,​

To state the resaon for the wars fought.​

I find myself tangled in your displeasure,​

The dislike for me has no measure.​

Consistant false conclusions are part of thou,​

Causing your body to bow.​

Why do you silently yell and torcher your life,​

With many a meaningless strife.​

Problems arise between you and another,​

Things that are hard to cover.​

But what if the other doesn't know,​

And you refuse to let your thoughts go,​

Let your feelings flow,​

Let your apathy show so that I may, ​

Help to bring you into the circle to stay.​

Trust and honesty I do hold high,​

So let this trouble by.​

Life is too short to worry and cry,​

So tell me,​

As I can then help to let this trouble by.​

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I'm very impressed! Excellent work there! Kudos from me!

 

thanks, i did think it was pretty coolsome...

 

I like the aggressive beat here and it rhymes well. Some word choices are archaic but that was probably your intent.

 

Oh no, it was awesorific.