She

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Burn, Oct 17, 2004.

  1. Burn

    Burn Member

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    Knowing nothing of life anymore,
    She wanders down the mountainside.

    Lost in herself,
    She falls.

    With words I express nothing....
    With words I paint the image,
    Fleeting to the mind,
    Save it reaches the heart of the soul.

    Knowing nothing of life anymore,
    She spirals down the cliff.

    Lost in herself,
    She falls.
     
  2. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    The masculine spiral,
    of lightning,
    descends zig-zag.

    The feminine spiral,
    of the serpent,
    ascents coiling.

    The immortal child,
    marries them
    in the heart.

    An Aeon, of balance,
    refuses the sky
    till the earth is acknowledged.

    I say, stay in defiance!
    Why rejoin the celestial father
    in his bachelors pad?

    I will return, reborn,
    until the rent is sown,
    and unity remains.
     
  3. maryjaneguitargurl

    maryjaneguitargurl I am just like you.

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    Did you write that? lol.. I like it..


    peace
    chickens
     
  4. nitemarehippygirl

    nitemarehippygirl Senior Member

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    sylvan, i loved that..
     
  5. kidder

    kidder Member

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    Burn, the third stanza doesn't quite make it over the line. The rest has potential. Keep at it. You might concentrate on the falling, the feel of it, the other consciousness. We fall from something but we also fall to... Hmmmmmmmm.
     
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