So many times my guitar and I sang for you as you sipped Earl Grey and laughed. But today my song is silenced and your cup is filled with tears.
Ohhh...This is beautiful! I have made a post in the writer's spotlight with this poem. Great job. I have read other work that you have done. I love the way you write!
Love this! So short and simple, yet gets its point across. Just a thought though, a random one. I read this in the Writers Spotlight section, so read the version before the slight change. When I read the first one, my mind instantly went to visions of Japanese tea ceremonies, tea houses and tea rooms, and to Zen Buddhism and the like. Probably not something you planned, but just thought you might find it interesting how changing "tea"(generic, vague, open) to "Earl Grey"(specific, precise, closed) could limit the imagery and such evoked. Of course, that gives more power & control over the effect of the poem, and my ramblings also ignore the fact that "Earl Grey" could evoke equally powerful images in other people. So, yeah, getting a bit anal here, so ignore my ramblings if needs be...!
Well I did like the tea ceremony effect, which I use in many poems, but I didn't want it in this one. I was shooting for a feel of disconnect and uncomfortable silence rather than tranquil and peaceful.
