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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by does2, Dec 28, 2009.

  1. does2

    does2 Member

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    I missed you, my heart had a hole.
    Less than whole, my heart was torn.
    The yearning smoldered like coal.
    Too bad you didn't send any porn. :p
    A stellar surprise made my month.
    It increased my feelings and confirmed my belief.
    With never a hunch, it was love punch.
    The relief was immense, the thoughtfulness was beyond reach.

    I cannot wait, it's eating me.
    Soon I'll be eating you, and confiding in perfection.
    Glee the moment we meet, anything for you. In time you'll see.
    Upon inspection I found my biggest fear is rejection.
    And you not liking me, I hope it won't be.
    Natural selection? Attraction. Acceptance? I have one doubt, one question.
    Am I good enough for unconditional perfection?


    PS

    You're the best.
     
  2. does2

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    After reading it, I think it sucks.

    That's what I get when I write one in 2 mins.
     
  3. Slight Return

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  4. neodude1212

    neodude1212 Senior Member

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    Welcome, writer.
     
  5. does2

    does2 Member

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    Your compliments always mean a great deal.

    No, I was recently locked up.
     
  6. YouFreeMe

    YouFreeMe Visitor

    Yeaaaaaaa.
     
  7. neodude1212

    neodude1212 Senior Member

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    wow, what a bitch
     
  8. does2

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    Haha, I guess not everybody gets this sudden, compelling urge to just write and have it flow for half an hour.
     
  9. neodude1212

    neodude1212 Senior Member

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    some people are retarded, what can ya do?
    It's much easier to be a sadist and criticize when someone shows the smallest inkling of emotional vulnerability and doubt rather than remain open-minded and give things a chance.
    And besides, the only thing she's posted is some jacked up short story she wrote in fuckin 8th grade, lol
     
  10. does2

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    I miss 8th grade.
     
  11. neodude1212

    neodude1212 Senior Member

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    I miss 8th grade too, except for the fact that everything everyone ever wrote in 8th was total bullshit
     
  12. does2

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    Hahaha. I was into like trying to finger fuck chicks in the bathroom and smoking pot in 8th grade.

    Not much time for writing.
     
  13. YouFreeMe

    YouFreeMe Visitor

    :D
    Hey, he admitted it.
     

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