Decision

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Abra Cadaver, Jan 3, 2010.

  1. Abra Cadaver

    Abra Cadaver Member

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    Decision

    looks to me like it's beginning to fade
    all you were
    all you did
    and all we were together

    it's been so long and
    everything has changed
    and the memories
    are slowly fading, fading away

    And just like before
    I'm falling apart
    with this aching in my heart
    and the lies that keep running through my mind
    make so sleep is getting harder to find

    There's this static in my brain
    till they think that I'm insane
    when all it is
    is just a cry out in vain
    to someone who will listen
    anyone who will listen

    Another pill another emotion
    another life just under this ocean

    How can I breathe when all I can see
    is just this gaping wide hole
    and sometimes I think I have a soul
    But it's only just a dream
    it doesn't matter anymore

    Telling myself you were real
    when I can barely feel
    all the numbness seeps through
    clouding my way towards you
    till I can't believe that it's true

    Leaving it all behind
    all that's in my mind
    till it's time to decide
    which one of us survives
     
  2. Codmouse

    Codmouse Senior Member

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    DAMN. That was freaking awesome man. All until the last murder part. Really cool dood. I am feeling that way right now and it hit home pretty close. (save the murder part)

    +1
     
  3. Peter Way-North

    Peter Way-North Member

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    Well, I'm nowhere near the poet that my sweety Abby is, but I've dabbled a little.

    Try this:

    She offered me her honor
    So I honored her offer
    And all night long
    I was on her
    And off her........


    It's short, I know.....but poignant
     
  4. knottygrl

    knottygrl Member

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    Very lyrical, could be a song. You write music?
     
  5. Abra Cadaver

    Abra Cadaver Member

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    Thanks guys! :D

    Actually I did have a rhythm going through my mind when I was writing this. I have written songs before that other bands have used and given me credit for, LOL. I do play a few instruments and I enjoy playing music but I think I'm more into the lyrical part of song writing.
     
  6. knottygrl

    knottygrl Member

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    Definitely...you could write song lyrics for sure! write more please!
     
  7. dan1701d

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    Good stuff, anymore progress on it?
     

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