Alone - EDIT THIS!

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by ExperimentWilderness, Feb 18, 2010.

  1. ExperimentWilderness

    ExperimentWilderness Member

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    maybe youd be better of alone
    but itd be better off unknown
    like the ghosts that wake you up
    just to remind you
    that you done left me all alone
    greiving and swallowin down this pick me up
    like why god just pick me up and dust me off
    clear this weight off of my shoulders
    lucid state, i wish to hold her
    why would she just get up n go
    i woke up yesterday and in my hand she left a note
    I open it up and take a look and so now heres what she wrote
    baby you dont know me and you never will
    im sorry for the fact of that it had to be like this
    but i couldnt have you going all emotional, listen.
    so i took it upon myself to leave you with just a love letter
    maybe someday you will find yourself a better lover, so.
    she see me rollin n spindlin,
    forgettin what im spittin n'
    all of the above when im makin conversation n'
    she dont even want me cause shes makin me so nervous man


    i need some people to edit this or change what you think is not right. its part of my song but i dont feel right about it. lemme know!
     
  2. hotwater

    hotwater Senior Member Lifetime Supporter

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    I don't know If this will help but here it is [​IMG]

    Maybe you’d be better off alone
    but I’d be better off unknown
    like the ghosts that wake you up
    Just to remind you, you fucked up
    You left me all alone


    Grieving and swallowing down this pick me up
    Dust me off and pick me up
    Clear this weight off of my shoulders
    Lucid state, I wish to hold her
    Why would she just get up and go


    I woke up yesterday and she left me a note
    I opened it up, and here’s what she wrote
    baby you don’t know me and you never will
    Im sorry for the fact of that you’re emotional still
    but I couldn’t have you going all emotional just for the thrill


    So I leave you this a love letter
    That maybe someday you’ll find a better lover
    She see’s me rolling and spindling in my hummer
    playing to the beat of a different drummer
    All of the above when Im makin conversation
    I no longer get those good vibrations


    h
     
  3. ExperimentWilderness

    ExperimentWilderness Member

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    hahaha yeah man i dig it, im glad to see you had a bit of fun at the end there good touch brotha haha. i should get you to edit all my shit! haha
     

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