Hmm... you should listen to a song I wrote... it's called "SHIT"... hahaaha.. and I just heard my dad say "A lotta crazy shit goin' on around there" right when I typed that.
The ideas are all there, the tempo and groove is there (for the most part, there is always room for more rythmic tightness) They do lack a singer, a role that the effect heavy guitar seem to take up. But the hope and promise is there, there are more than three tasteful and beautiful points that must be cultivated and allowed to grow.