in the wind, petals blow branches sway feelings grow in a world where no one sees what goes on behind the trees screaming laughter tears the sky you're left there to wonder why they're looking down reading your mind because they know it's almost time so travel on follow the road the gravel ripping at your souls but don't look back or the city will burn come back to us and share what you've learned
The ending gets a bit choppy. The lack of punctuation comes off as sloppy and careless. I find this one to be rather generic, but overall it flows nice and is well written.
one of your strengths is story telling, if i had to give out a shout. I imagined some elves or fairy's in the tree tops, looking down at a little red riding hood type character who happens to be walking through the enchanted forest. No dialog was spoken between the parties, just a mental energy connection. Danger or fear in store for the traveler?
