"AMMO" What you say Will ricochet And end up hurting you Toughened skin Won’t let you in Bullets on the loose Left these holes Insides exposed But stronger, now I am Pay the price Roll the dice Are you now a man? Chambered words Fired and heard Tears begin to fall Nothings easy Barrel sees me What have you solved? Been shot down Shattered sound On my feet again I’ll take the pain But you remain A cry within the wind Copyright (C) Angel Campbell
Couldn't help but notice you're from Billings! I'm currently writing a novel, and part of it takes place in Billings. Thought you might appreciate that. Anyways, it's a very good start to the poem. I feel like it might be better in free verse. Often times, when you try to make things rhyme, the meaning which you intended can get distorted, or not as clear as you might have liked. That said, it's a pretty nice job. Hope to see more from you!
really? .. a novel takin place in good ol billings haha. thats pretty cool. with the whole rhyme scheme i believe the rhythm either comes naturally and flows or seems forced. most of what i write just comes out in rythmic verse. my brains pre-concieved notion of what poetry is i guess haha. i have a few non-rhyming poems but seem to favor the rhythmic style. thanx for your input and maybe i can read some pieces of your novel some day.
poetry, i ask because each of your postings are heartfelt. so i can only imagine that you are up to something.
ive actually had a writing block for awhile .. been posting sum of my older works .. i choose the ones that reflect my current emotional state tho. seems like ive done this before haha. damn it do i never learn haha
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