New poem I wrote

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by dazedgatsby, Nov 16, 2010.

  1. dazedgatsby

    dazedgatsby shitheel

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    Shine your light towards my way
    Make my life fill with joy
    I don't want to be sad
    I'm not a toy
    I like the everlasting pain that fills my head
    I miss the comfort in being bad
    I try to stop my life
    But I never succeed

    Bow down to your master
    Make yourself known to the world
    End it all in one shot
    Make it all end
    Today
    Tomorrow
    Even tonight you can make all your problems go away
    Just pull it and drift into a life long sleep



    Tell me what you think! :)
     
  2. raz5

    raz5 زینب

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    i get what you are trying to say from the last few words but i do not understand the beginning
     
  3. dazedgatsby

    dazedgatsby shitheel

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    Its about the ending of ones life.
     
  4. raz5

    raz5 زینب

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    i cannot figure how the beginning represents that though
     
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