(These are lyrics to a song that I'm writing.) Path comes to an iced crossing, Won't you come down from your tower? Follow me down your dreamcatcher, careful not to wake the arachnid gaurds Dream walking (Dream on) Don't wake me, no Deny minutes, seconds, hours What's counting anymore? We'll feign danger with whispers Keep your footing, for the morning's not far behind us The audience distracted by the show
Stephen King's lawyers say Nope. Although you could probably get away with Dreamcaught. I wouldn't be surprised if that was a copyrighted Canadian rock band, but they'd be too unsuccesful to really check on infringement rights.
I don't hear the music. Poetry and lyrics are different; you can't judge them the same (unless it's country ballads, maybe) Goobly gook can make a decent song; The Raven would probably suck set to music.
@lodog I was originally gonna call it "Dream Walking", but then I found out that's the name of a Keith Urban(or insert dissatisfying country music singer name) song. Dream walking would be more true to what it's about. As for the unsuccesful Canadian rock band comment: Did you mean that dreamcaught sounds like the name of a failed canadian rock band? or that these lyrics sound like that of a failed canadian rock band? I never realized how short this is until I typed it out here for the first time. @duck You're right. Maybe this isn't the place for lyrics. Do you like any songs with goobly gook for lyrics? Are these lyrics goobly gook?
Yes, I do like some songs with gibberish lyrics (got sick of my own word there =P) No, I don't think these are necessarily gibberish, either; but I still don't see the point of rating a song just by the lyrics. I mean, no matter how good this part is; doesn't truly determine if it would make for a decent song; there's still so many factors. It seems like judging a movie by it's storyboard. But if I am to humor you: I don't really understand it but it has some decent imagery. But I do catch little bits of meaning, I think, (think Bush lyrics). It reminds me a little of Along the Watchtower by Bob Dylan for some reason. And Dreamcatcher seems like kind of a contradictory title with the tone of the song, but that's a comment not a complaint, cause that could be what you're going for. Also, some songs don't have that many lyrics and either use a lot of repetition or have them spaced out by the music, so the length doesn't necessarily matter
I like lyrics that are obscure and have some powerful imagery that lets you put your own meaning on them. As you have the lyrics now it's not really clear what it's about. So it works as a song for me. In poetry it would be nice to have less obscurity and more consistency/clarity. Like there are two extremes -- impossible to grasp the point vs. too simple and plain and in your face explained -- your Dreamcatcher is definitely well towards the more obscure direction. But it's nice, I might not get it, but I like it. Except the last line is too mundane somehow given the earlier dream-like images IMHO.
@ Millicent The audience are the two sleeping people, and the main charachters are their astral selves meeting as they have the same dream (meeting in a dream-state). The show is the dream. The protagonists are the two peoples dreamt projections of themselves. The antagonists are their bodies (which could wake at any moment pulling the two lovers apart, and possibly making one vulnerable to their own imaginations), and of course the morning. I thought the idea of two people being able to find eachother in a shared dream was romantic, so i went with it.. I hope that explaining it (what it means to me) didn't ruin it for you, but i thought I'd clear up the meaning of the last line Thank you very much for your input!
