Coline

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by PixelRose, Oct 31, 2011.

  1. PixelRose

    PixelRose Guest

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    She shot me her look
    her ice cold glare
    all the time she took
    could've been a nice stare

    give me some gasoline
    and matches
    let's make a scene
    a huge fight hatches

    She bit my neck
    i grabbed her eyeball
    no one could check
    if any would fall

    Stop the fight
    just tell me the truth
    what's on your sight?
    you strangled youth​
     
  2. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    Hey, cool you shared here. This was touching on a lot of themes and ideas but not a single one was done with any care ore depth. Too shallow and elementary...or too yester year.

    Sprinkle some of this on some Dr. Seuss and maybe we get some green eggs and
    effort.
     
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